Rock River Rock (IP)
By jennifer
Sun, 01 Mar 2009
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Rock, River, Rock (1st March, 2009, 12.08pm)
Rock, river, rock;
sway me in your arms
like a babe with a smile;
slow-grow in me
a penchant for your deep,
green charms.
You slide, slurp, slide
past my little blue boat
like a great darkling snake
or a medieval moat;
gurgle, bubble, gurgle;
I listen to your tunes;
like a street-busking girl
you fill my room
and my mind; I hear
blue moon.
You slither, slip, slither
past my soft-floating ship
like the midgard serpent
or a half-stunned basilisk;
hum, river, hum;
wrap me in your sounds
like a blanket of song;
instill in me
a keening for your voice,
undrowned.
Jennifer Pickup
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liked the first verse
Permalink Submitted by littleditty on
liked the first verse especially, and the repeated snake and castle imagery - lots of symbolic imagery in this journey down a soft, singing river, sail on! Enjoyed.
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Gosh!! There seems to be
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Gosh!! There seems to be lot of water around this afternoon on ABC:-)
Great poem, Jennifer ... and my favourite lines:-
"I listen to your tunes;
like a street-busking girl
you fill my room
and my mind; I hear
blue moon."
Lovely song too, 'Blue Moon'.
T X
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Pretty and light feeling to
Pretty and light feeling to the poem. Being a sailor on the first read I was alarmed at the soft-floating ship reading it as soft floating; bringing flashes of impending doom as a weak and flexing section of hull suddenly gives way. Though a second glance at that verse corrected this. perhaps another word or softly? only a suggestion - Jim
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Lovely stuff Jen; quite
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Lovely stuff Jen; quite soothing and spring like. I could almost feel the season changing ;) Enjoyed!
Chris X
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