Too Much Detail

By Dynamaso

Sat, 28 Mar 2009
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10 comments
 

He stripped away
the façade,
the filligree of
pretense,
built up over
years of
conditioning.

Instincts engaged,
he stepped
off the edge
into the abyss,
where his
future waited
patiently.

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Comments

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
The more I read this the better it gets; very, very good mate! Isn't it funny, that the less you say sometimes,the sharper it becomes and the more it means; this is a perfect example. I think this is what is referred to as 'real poetry!' Great stuff! Chris

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Chris, short, sharp poetry is a favourite of mine to read. I like the idea of using as few words as possible to convey as much meaning as one can. Thanks for your kind words, mate. These are much appreciated

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I love minimalistic poetry so I'm in love with this week's IP and all the stuff it's producing! Chris is right, less words - more power! Loved this one ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Magic, thanks very much. I find it a lot harder to write but so satisfying.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Very clever, Chris. I like this. Less is definitely more:-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Good stuff D :-) atb L

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Tina, thanks so much for your kind comment. Just so you know, my name is Mark. Chris is 'Threeleafshamrock'. I'm the one with the goatee :D

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Thanks very much, Lenchenelf.

 

Submitted by Ewan on
No, I'm the one with the goatee, it's on my picture! I'm Spartacus! Mind you I had to check this was written by you Mark... I found it different to your other stuff. Which isn't to say I didn't like it. Ewan.

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Submitted by Dynamaso on
Sure you're not Woger or maybe Bwian? But really, whoever you are, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one :)