"ANGEL FACE"
By Cavalcader
Wed, 17 Jun 2009
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33 comments
While waiting for a friend in book
shop for coffee I looked at this magazine and jotted it down.
As I look into your beautiful face
The colours of your shawl light up
this place
The big brown eyes staring at me
maybe your thoughts are wandering
out to sea
of a loved one coming home to you
the delicate make up and the pert nose
no one knows where you have come from
looking like a mystic rose
or maybe you made the shawl
the pinks and mauves that are
interwoven
but chosen them to match
the flowers in the garden.
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Comments
There is a sweet simplicity
There is a sweet simplicity about this. One of your very best.
You need ´Pert´in line 8.
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I quite agree with Ewan.
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I quite agree with Ewan.
Quite magical, this one, Julie;-)
Tina
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Sorry i didn't comment last
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
Sorry i didn't comment last night cavalcaderl - battery problems! This is a lovely poem, well laid out and flowing very nicely. Good stuff! Sarah x
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I agree with other comments
I agree with other comments - this has a lovely tone to it. A gentle sense sadness. Margot
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Just wanted to say, many
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Just wanted to say, many congratulations on your well-deserved cherry, Julie;-)
Tina
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Hi Julie. (-:
Hi Julie. (-: CONGRATULATIONS :-)
This part was my favourite :
"As I look into your beautiful face
The colours of your shawl light up the
this place
The big brown eyes staring at me
maybe your thoughts are wandering
out to sea
of a loved one coming home to you"
Looking forward to more ;-)
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Lovely, gentle story Julie,
Permalink Submitted by lenchenelf on
Lovely, gentle story Julie, you bring a warmth to all you post, all the best Lena
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Hi there, Julie;-) It's
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi there, Julie;-) It's that smiley face again.
Glad you set things right with Angel Face and I hope you found a nice brooch. I've got one too. Got it on Amazon, actually:-)
As far as your question is concerned about the 'Forum' and 'Comments', I think your thanks should be in the 'Forum'.
Not sure what you mean about 'The Body'. But just guessing...in this kind of situation, it would probably mean 'the major part, the most important part of whatever it was you had written.
Hope this helps.
If not, try again. I'm here to listen and assist, if I can;-)
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Julie, I am so pleased for
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Julie, I am so pleased for you. That is fantastic. Never give up hope...I think this experience of yours teaches us.
Thank you for letting me know. I am over the moon;-)
Tina x
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Cavalcaderl Loved this
Cavalcaderl
Loved this .
Took me back to Dublin and a coffee shop with the sweet innocence of life .
Keep it going .
Mcscraic
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It's really very nice.
Permalink Submitted by vidit.chopra on
It's really very nice.
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This was a nicely
Permalink Submitted by hilary west on
This was a nicely descriptive poem. I think you've taken quite a journey, but it's worth the effort.
It was engaging and atmospheric !
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Hi julie, just found this
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi julie,
just found this poem, it's absolutely beautiful,
you have written with such grace and magic, I
really loved reading this one.
Jenny.
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