Forgetting that

By Beeme
Mon, 30 Nov 2009
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12 comments
You examine her teenage mind-
she prefers a quicker pace to love,
so unlike you.
You try to charm her with your eyes
forgetting that you taught them to
smile at me,not her.
You kiss her but her eyes don't close
forgetting that it was you and I
who shared those moments.
You tame her with your cheeky smile
forgetting that the perfect curve has
etched at one end my initials and
at the other, yours.
You try to hide it,
the floral perfume laying on
your shirt,my trade mark scent.
Your words deny me,
forgetting that for every part
of you there is at least two parts me.
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new Beeme This is great
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme
This is great verse;
I lik it all is;
Your words deny me,
forgetting that for every part
of you there is at least two
parts me.
very good.
sorry spacing wrong here
larger print.nite!
julie xx
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'forgetting that the perfect
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'forgetting that the perfect curve has
etched at one end my initials and
at the other, yours.'
- just love, love, love this image and the last lines are wonderful! One of my favourites of yours Beeme!
Magic xxx
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I like this - it is getting
I like this - it is getting good - but I don't understand this stanza:
You try to charm her with your eyes,
forgetting that they only smile at me,
That they have spent years reading me.
You look at yourself with your own eyes? Are they on stalks? It just seems odd.
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So thrilled this got a
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
So thrilled this got a cherry Beeme ;) Well done!
Magic xxx
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new Beeme Love it all,
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme
Love it all, great1
just seen rosey Cherry!
sorry bit late.
well done.verse;
You tame her with your cheeky smile
forgetting that the perfect curve has
etched at one end of my initials and
at the other, yours.
beautiful
julie x cavalcader (:-
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