A Father's Tears

By threeleafshamrock

Sun, 02 May 2010
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He screamed in glass-breaking decibels;
Help me! Please Help me!

But I could not hear his cry;
I was deafened by angry eyes,
and hateful glance.
I misread the furrowed brow,
the protracted silences
and the tempered tears,
for insolence.

Now, I whisper in candle flickering gasps;
I'm sorry! I am so sorry!

But he does not hear my pain;
he is deaf to my pleading eyes
and guilty glance.
He cannot see my furrowed brow,
my protracted silences
and the tempered tears;
my penance.

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Heart-breaking tale, Chris! Love these lines: 'Now, I whisper in candle flickering gasps; I'm sorry! I am so sorry!' Well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by beauty_and_the_beast on
Now, I whisper in candle flickering gasps; I'm sorry! I am so sorry! That was my favorite line, simply beautiful. I read a lot of your poems and love the humour behind them. I also like your emotional ones.There's one you wrote, well I think it was you. The one were the women has pills and goes church. Anyway great work from a great artist x

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Magic. It is sad, when a rift becomes a rut but it's a parent's job to rebuild the road; it may not have a smooth surface but at least it maintains access...and that, is critical. Chris XXXX

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Beauty, glad yo ;u like my demented ramblings ;) I have written so much stuff now that I don't remember half of it myself...I'll have to go back over it and read it lol. Thanks for taking the time. Chris ;)

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
ouch. This poem definitely strikes a chord with me. It can be so difficult sometimes can't it Chris?

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Impossible Insert! There is no book (worth a toss) on parenting, nor can there ever be, I suppose, because no two people are alike. Hopefully, we can keep ahead of the game, before it becomes tragic. Chris ;) XXX

Submitted by shoe on
Very emotive stuff, and I really like the repetition, shame it's true for some.:~}

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Shirley, glad you liked and couldn't agree more, with regard to your observation Chris ;) XXX

Submitted by Anna Marie on
The repetition of this is beautiful and heart wrenching. Great work. Really soulful. Anna

 

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
This is beautiful, lots of emotion like the others have said. I like the reference to "glass breaking" in the first stanza, as throughout the poem their appears to be a glass wall of between the two characters.

 

Submitted by Nolan on
Always I thought he loved the black dog. Time learnt it was far worse for him than for us. Midnight of the soul. Overcome by darkness. Brothers in arms &&
 

Submitted by russiandoll on
This is so poignant and bittersweet. Great piece of work and reflection, well done you.