IP - Reflection

Cherry

By Margharita

Thu, 19 Aug 2010
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I remember her sadness after each visit to her mother: ‘Gran is getting so vague’. As we drive home from our latest visit to her I sigh and shake my head: ‘Gran is getting so vague.’ In the rear view mirror I catch sight of my children, watching the sadness in my eyes: I see into their future, and mine.

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Submitted by tcook on
Very good indeed - possible my favourite of these so far.

Submitted by McWilfo on
I agree - it unfolds a little more with each word and then you make sense of it all. Very clever. Liked the repetition of words as well - this emphasises the sombre tone somehow.

Submitted by Margharita on
Thank you both - and for the cherry, Tony. I actually sat down to write something funny, but it didn't quite come out that way...:(

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
"In the rear view mirror I catch sight of my children, watching the sadness in my eyes: I see into their future, and mine." These lines sum up the vulnerability we all feel and which you so cleverly describe in this short piece. Very good.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with Luigi, those last lines are spot on. Well done on the cherry ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Margharita on
Thanks, Luigi and Magic. And congrats on the Twitter/Facebook pick, Magic!

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Margharita! It really was the cherry on top of a fantastic day ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by darkenwolf on
Very good, short, sweet and to the point. Well done on the cherry ;)

Submitted by Margharita on
Thanks for taking the time to read.