Hearts song

By Kahdai

Tue, 12 Oct 2010
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11 comments
 

You know, how you dont have to see
someones face to know they mean it
That's how it is with a song to me
I know a true voice when I hear it
In your head write words carefully
conjure up volume from your lungs,
smile but in your voice tears know

So maybe still may see the colours
sometimes you even feel the warmth
but with nothing left to sing for,
it may feel as if you could give up
as your heart doesn't care anymore
you only sing a sad song, heart is
where the tune you sing is created

(large number) of notes float away
if a bubble lands on your sholder
think it could contain my melody
a cloud over the moon lights up
we ice skate on saturns rings
let our wings unfurl again
and our loud heart sings.

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Oh Kahdai, you write the most beautiful poems, I love, we skate on saturn rings, let our wings unfurl again and our loud heart sings. It's so magical. Thankyou. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
The sentiment behind this is beautiful, Kahdai. You have some wonderful imagery here, especially in the last stanza:- "...if a bubble lands on your sholder think it could contain my melody a cloud over the moon lights up we ice skate on saturns rings..." Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Wow & most beautiful comment Jenny! Magical,? really well I love that! Thankyou both! Tina I might well make it into image sometime too :) sentiment is... complicated haha maybe it can become my IP K x x

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Kahdai, You know, the reason I like your poetry, is because it comes right from the heart. That is a rare thing today. Since I have been on ABC Tales, I have discovered that there are many people that are able to write from the heart, I never realised until I came on here. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Kahdai I really think this is most beautiful- divine actually to coin an appropriate word. I'd wish for you that your grammar was just an inkling better- maybe a cherry? I hope so cheers ;)pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Really there's nothing wrong with this one at all- sorry about my last comment. I think you have done it very well indeed. (as if is in 2 words I think) You have completely your own style- that is fabulous. Very unique. ;)pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
Thankyou again Jenny, writing from the heart I hope gives other people some of the emotion when they read it. Pia, maybe I would get cherries on other old poems if I knew where my grammar was, I know I always write asif and dont notice when I check it! thanks anyway ;) K x

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Very much enjoyed and wonderful last stanza. :-)

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Thankyou very much fatboy74 :) ! K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by shoe on
This wonderful, one of your best Kahdai, i just cannot choose a favourite bit, I love it all.

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Ooh wow thankyou shoe x!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "