Cloctober
By alice sunderland
Tue, 19 Oct 2010
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10 comments
When the wind winds up
and trees shed leaves...
as gardeners leave sheds...
and a persecution complex begins
for roof-tiles and wheelie-bins....
Clocks get wound-up not knowing
if they're coming or going.
Each uncertain toc
brings on a nervous tic....
and..(with too much time
on their hands)
They're soon implicated
in daylight robbery.
Only when the Spring unwinds
will they have the chance
to turn over
a new leaf.
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Really enjoyed this,
Permalink Submitted by Margharita on
Really enjoyed this, especially the bit about the clocks. Great use of language. This is definitely a print it out and pin it on my noticeboard one!
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Love the second stanza in
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Love the second stanza in particular, this is great :)
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I think it works best as it
Permalink Submitted by Margharita on
I think it works best as it is - while the middle bit does stand out, it needs the framing of the first and last stanzas. And there is lovely stuff in both of those too!
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For me the first stanza sets
Permalink Submitted by chooselife on
For me the first stanza sets the scene. The last line of the last stanza brings us back to where we started.
Leave it as it is.
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Yup, I agree with all that's
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Yup, I agree with all that's been said - it's lovely as it is :)
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You're very welcome, glad I
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
You're very welcome, glad I could help :)
Rachel xx
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Very clever; love it! Chris
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Very clever; love it!
Chris ;)
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