Free-fall

Cherry

By Beeme

Sun, 13 Feb 2011
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16 comments
 

Sea mist rolls inland
a teal-green sunset
bleeds into the ocean

fierce currents drag me
towards the rock's edge
chancing a glimpse
of the afterlife

my skin;
gaunt, drawn, taut
marble pink-grey
butterfly bruises
search for the horizon

light shines blue
the injured moon
drowns herself
in glistening air

my body
rises towards
honey-dew light
my scars spread wings
free-fall off the cliff.

Certificate U
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Comments

Submitted by fatboy74 on
This is very impressive Beeme 'chancing a glimpse of the afterlife' 'injured moon'. Really well done. I love these lyrical abstractions of yours. :-)

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thanks very much Fatboy :] Appreciate the suggestion. Really happy you enjoyed this so much. Beeme xx

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Submitted by seashore on
Now I'm wondering what FB suggested....... Anyway, Beeme, I love reading your work and this is no exception. Beautiful last stanza. xx

Submitted by Beeme on
lol :] Thank you so much Seashore, for your lovely comment. Glad you enjoyed :] xx Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Highhat on
I am growing into a big fan of your "lyrical abtractions" Beeme. I think Fatboy put it so well. A perfect poem. Much enjoyed the purity of every stanza. So well cut out ;)Pia

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
beeme I really like this one. In the final stanza, I wonder if you need that comma

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Awwh thank you so very much Pia! :] I'm so glad you enjoyed this one so much! xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Insert, really happy you like this one. I've removed the comma in the last stanza xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you for the cherry Abctales xx

k.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is just beautiful, Beeme. Well done indeed on the cherry;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Tina :-] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Stunning, Beeme. I'm loving all your colourful poetry since I've got back online - some gorgeous imagery in this, well done on the cherry and looking forward to more :) Rachel xx

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you so much Rachel! I hope I can deliver some more colourful poetry that you may like too xx

k.

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
I'm pretty certain you can, Beeme - can't wait! ;0)xx

Submitted by Beeme on
:o) teehee I hope so!! xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thanks so much Nathan :) Really happy you liked this so much! Beeme xx

k.