A NEAR ESCAPE

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 13 Mar 2011
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I stood in the garden
looking up at the sky
as hundreds of starlings
they went flying by,

a kaleidoscope of shapes
enveloping the air
I thought it was amazing
till they pooped in my hair,

so when it's said and done
if you'll pardon the pun
I stand here and sigh
thank god it wasn't my eye.

Certificate U
Poem
Poems
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
how funny Jenny- thanks for the laugh ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thanks Pia, apart from the poop, it was an amazing sight, to see all those starlings making shapes in the sky. Thanks for reading and your comment which is always welcome. Jenny.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Awww poor you, Jenny! But glad you got a brilliant poem out of it ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thanks for the kind words Magic, now I look back on it, was kind of funny. I wonder if it's lucky to be pooped on by a Starling? Thanks for reading. Jenny.

 

Submitted by shoe on
You lucky thing, despite the oops! :}

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thanks so much for your comment shoe and for reading. Jenny.

 

Submitted by oldpesky on
Good morning Jenny Nice little ditty to start my day. Not that you being pooped on brightens me up. Although I know you seen the funny side too. It terms of form the rhythm lost it slightly and the last stanza hasa different rhyming scheme from the previous two. I'm sure you could tighten them up if you wanted too, but I hope you don't mind if I offer a couple of suggestions which keep to the rhythm and rhyme of the first stanza, as I've enjoyed the images so much. I stood in the garden looking up at the sky as hundreds of starlings they went flying by, kaleidoscope of shapes enveloping the air though it was amazing they pooped in my hair, but when all's said and done as I stand here and sigh I thank our god above it wasn't my eye. Really hope you don't mind kevin

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou very much kevin for your version of my poem, it was very good, thankyou also for reading and commenting. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on
Been there, had that, yeuk!

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Oh dear! well I'm glad I'm not the only one Sooz006. There were absolutely hundreds of the birds flying around, our garden is covered in starling poo, still never mind, just need some rain to wash it away. Thanks for reading and commenting. Jenny.

 

Submitted by TVR on
Neat and funny, Jenny. I once got shat on by a seagull. I was absolutely covered in stinky stuff. It was like someone emptying a bucket over me. Talk about 'bombs away', I would never have believed there was so much crap in those things. I think watching Starlings is amazing. You can see a fantastic display on the Somerset levels. Thanks for giving me a good laugh. sd

TVR

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Well all I can say sue, is that it is definitely good luck to get it from seagulls, I had it once while sunbathing on the beach under a rock face down in Cornwall, luckly though it landed on my arm so that wasn't so bad. Thanks for reading and commenting, glad I could give you a laugh, that was my aim, pardon the pun! Jenny.

 

Submitted by TVR on
Thanks Jenny, I meant to say I really liked your description: a kaleidoscope of shapes

TVR

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is great, Jenny. And I have had a 'near miss' situation, many times. I too loved your 'kaleidoscope of shapes.' Well done;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, thanks so much for reading this piece and the nice comment, luckily I think they have found places to roost, my partner said that's why they do this air display. Have a great day. Jenny.