A List of Things I Would Do to James McAvoy
By MistakenMagic
Thu, 22 Sep 2011
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There was no anticipation this time - only a sense of foreboding.
The street light on the corner faded to a flickering, blood-red wound,
and when I woke up at dawn it stood there, black and solemn,
like a burned-out match.
*
It was brief, but beautiful. We kissed between words;
our mouths shushed when moulding the roundness of vowels,
and your lips dangled there like an ellipsis.
*
One night, whilst my parents were away,
I sat out on the patio, listening to Nina Simone,
blowing smoke into a glass of whiskey.
I savoured the burn unfurling in the back of my throat,
and my voice cracked like the ice as I sang along.
I swear I saw a shooting star.
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new MistakenMagic new Lovely
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new MistakenMagic
new Lovely poem
full of images large,
and very descriptive.
Well done all of it though.
Good writer.
stanza I like
I savoured the burn unfurling
in the back of my throat,
and my voice
cracked like the ice as I sang along
I swear I saw a shooting star.
Hope your well.
Missed meeting you "Wheatsheaf".
I must admit don't know poets
like you do, and mentioned.
all the best julie
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Short but sweet Magic. Who
Short but sweet Magic. Who is James McAvoy? Must google
like the whiskey burn- ha ha
;)Pia
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He used to sit opposite me
He used to sit opposite me quite often on the Brighton to London train. He looked quite normal to me. We never spoke!
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I had to look up the name
I had to look up the name just to see who it was. lol
Ah yes... I have the Children of Dune series
Can't say I blame ya ;) Cute kid...
This is a really well written piece Darlin, beautiful :)
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Gosh Magic, how romantic you
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Gosh Magic,
how romantic you are. I loved the way you described
that second stanza:-
It was brief, but beautiful. We kissed between words;
our mouths shushed when moulding the roundness of
vowels,
and your lips dangled there like an ellipsis.
Had to look up that word 'ellipsis,' a completely
new word to me.
You never know he might get to read this piece of
writing.
But if he doesn't, it was great reading and thankyou
for sharing.
Jenny.
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Hi there, Magic. May I join
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi there, Magic. May I join the party, please?;-)
I agree with fb, 'fabulous writing' and I'll sure drink to that;-)
Tina xxx
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Much enjoyed this little
Much enjoyed this little one, and the image of you singing along to Nina Simone, half gone on whiskey will stay with me for some time!
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Wonderful. The last line is
Wonderful. The last line is great. I ended a chapter in a novel once with roughly the same image without quite knowing why but feeling that it worked. There's something about shooting stars that end things off well - something to do with the silence and uncertainty afterwards (I think ... but probably just rambling). Rob
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Can't decide which is more
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Can't decide which is more divine - James or this poem. I really enjoyed this, Magic - you don't half write some beautiful poetry ;)
Rachel xx
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A gorgeous poem for a
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
A gorgeous poem for a gorgeous man. I was half expecting this to be a list of some rather naughty things one would like to do with James but of course coming from you it had to be more than that. It's mesmerising and stunning with a sprinkle of naughtiness.
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dir Magic the title had been
dir Magic the title had been put me off until now, and am glad as it is lovely really no evil plot and lets pretend it was a shooting star anyway :) K
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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