Just A Dream

By skinner_jennifer

Wed, 22 Feb 2012
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I dreamt I wandered the ocean's edge,
my black – sleek – shiny cat at my side,
I saw my face up in the sky, clouds
colouring my lengthy black hair...

delving into the depths of my
soul, feelings of parallel worlds,
kept me joyous in my content...
giving me a feeling of tranquillity,

maybe this was heaven...
as the moon's fullness,
reflected on the gentle surf,
undulating across the very
earth I stand upon.

My feline friend leads me on,
no words leave her lips, only the
voice of understanding do I hear,
our minds as one...till at last my
body sinks...dreamlike, between
the corals of my womb, where
creatures deposit their eggs and
life's renewed upon my waking.

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Jenny - hope you're feeling loads better, and judging by this poem, I'm keeping my fingers crossed that you are;-) It really is a beautiful poem. (Just a small point...'dreamlike' - all one word.) I also wondered if if might be a good idea to add the word 'lips' after the line 'no words leave her (lips)'. It makes quite a nice internal rhyme with 'sinks' later on in the stanza. Just an idea, anyway;-) My favourite stanza is this:- "delving into the depths of my soul, feelings of parallel worlds, kept me joyous in my content... giving me a feeling of tranquillity," You mention 'feline friend' ( I like the alliteration by the way;-) and I know my cat, was always a wonderful comfort to me, when I was poorly. Very much enjoyed;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, yes thankyou for asking, I do feel loads better now, went out for the first time since last Thursday, it felt very strange, I felt very stiff and my legs ached, but apart from that, enjoyed the walk. Thankyou also for reading this dream I had, you were certainly right about the lips, so I've put that in, also put dreamlike as one word. I know what you mean about your cat being of comfort to you, when you are ill. I used to have cats, but not anymore, I'm afraid. Well I'm off to read your work now. Thankyou again. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Funny this was a dream because you captured the dreamlike atmosphere very well Jenny- I like the thought of "corals of my womb"- very dreamy indeed. I'm so glad you are feeling better and back to the drawing board with your poems- lovely. ;)Pia

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Yes, like Pia that phrase stood out for me too Jenny - sorry to hear you've been unwell but glad you are on the mend and writing again./ :-)

 

Submitted by Indrani Ananda on
Indrani Ananda Sorry to hear you've not been well, Jenny. This poem is serene and has the feeling of being well rested after some hard time and waking with relief. That last stanza is so true, the wordless way a cat can speak and understand its owner, and the priceless comfort they give when you are ill. This really struck a chord with me in a wistful way. Thanks for sharing it. Indrani.

Indrani Ananda

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, thankyou for reading this piece. I know what you mean about the way I wrote this, but I kept drifting in and out of sleep, it was very strange, had a lot of dreams while I was ill, they were very vivid and strange. Thankyou for your get well wishes and for commenting. I'm definitely on the mend. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello FB, the corals of my womb came about, because I was travelling down through what felt like a labyrinth of tunnels under the water, I was swimming along but I could breathe, even though I was under water, it was a very strange feeling. Then I came to a place where there were these eggs and I felt extremely comforted by them, the cat was always at my side. Anyway thankyou for your comment and reading. Also I'm doing a lot better, thankyou for your kind thoughts. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Indrani, I'm much better now, I really appreciate your kind words, thankyou. Dreams are strange things, I always enjoy them and find they are an important part of my life, taking me away to other worlds, where would we be without them? You are so right about a cat being a comfort to you when you're ill, just smoothing a cat, I find can be extremely relaxing and therapeautic. It's good to know you enjoyed reading this piece and thankyou for letting me know. Jenny.