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Cherry

By seashore

Fri, 08 Jun 2012
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29 comments
 

Remember me....
the woman with the
watercolour dreams
and scribbled thoughts,

always waiting for the
man with a van to come
again, pack me in a
cardboard box labelled

address unknown, deliver
me somewhere familiar,
unfamiliar - another room
with a red-brick view,

its all the same to me...
if I lay out my pebbles,
and bits of old seaweed,
hang a seascape on the

shower-room wall, I can
close my eyes, put a
shell to my ear and still
make-believe I'm home.

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by sid on
Love this. For some reason these lines- 'its all the same to me... if I lay out my pebbles, and bits of old seaweed,'- really moved me

 

Submitted by seashore on
Hi there sid - thanks for reading and commenting & letting me know your thoughts. Interestingly, that's the bit I added last.

Submitted by scratch on
This is excellent. A slow burn that builds to a white hot ending. Some reminders of universal truth here as well. Wonderful Seashore.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I could relate to this coral, having moved many times, but now settled. We are far from the sea, but like you say in your poem, I always manage to cover the house in shells and pebbles that I've picked up on my journeys. Wonderful poem, full of treasures. Hope you enjoy your new home. Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much scratch!

Submitted by seashore on
Hi Jenny, how are you? Glad you're settled. Not sure I ever will be, but guess that's the way it is... Coral x

Submitted by shoe on
Seashore, I can't match 25 times but I'm on you're tail!! This is so sad and really resonates with me, Hanging the same old pictures, finding a place for the same old pots and pans, waking each morning thinking will this be my home? I hope you find it...real soon.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Exactly, shoe......good to meet a fellow-mover. I don't know about you but I can't relate to people born and bred in one place where they've lived all their lives....I didn't plan this but then we never do, do we? Thanks for commenting and hope you too find/or have found a `home'.

Submitted by seashore on
Many thanks for the cherries, eds.

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Nice one seashore. Love the way you take your dreams with you. Home is somewhere and everywhere.

Parson Thru

Submitted by seashore on
..and a nice comment too, Parson Thru. Thank you.

Submitted by Geoffrey on
Well done on the cherry. 48 years in the same house and you'd be surprised at the number of things that I don't remember where I put them! In some cases I occasionally find things that I don't remember owning. Still it takes all sorts and at least I know where the tissues are kept ready for you next poem! The phrase 'red brick view' rings a bell.

Submitted by seashore on
Ah dear Geoffrey - might the losing and not remembering just be an age thing?? Just so long as you keep remembering where you live, I wouldn't worry too much! x

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hello dear seashore. Going with the tide I see, I like that "...if I lay out my pebbles, and bits of old seaweed..." I shall read this one again when walking the coast path Sunday, pasty and real ale at the end. ps "...another room with a red-brick view..." There is an old beach hut I know of that needs doing up, suitable for an artist.
ScoZen

Submitted by seashore on
I envy you the coastal walk, pasty (despite being a veggie!) and real ale at the end, ScoZen.....and the beach hut sounds very appealing. You never know - move 26 might just be on the cards!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
So sorry I was late getting to this one, Coral. I thought I'd moved loads of times until I read this;-) Home is where the heart is, so they say, and I agree with what has already been said in that it is somewhere and everywhere. Well done on the more than deserved cherry. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by seashore on
No need to aologise, Tina. To be honest, I wrote this soon after moving and have sat on it for a couple of months now as I didn't rate it, then posted it on a whim. Lots of soul-searching going on... Many thanks & very best wishes, Coral

Submitted by Shannan on
Make believe I'm home... can't tell you how many times I've done that... Thanks for sharing. Shannan

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks Shannon - it helps to know other people have been there too!

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
I'm in the process of moving myself at the moment, Coral, so this poem really spoke to me. I was going to copy/paste the stanza which spoke to me the most, but I can't. Each one has its own voice, and together they make this poem sing. What a wonderful read - so good to be reading your stuff again. Hope you are well, Rachel xx

Submitted by seashore on
Hi Rachel, what a lovely comment - thanks so much. Do hope your move goes ok - tough business isn't it? All the best, Coral xx PS. Just checked your profile as I was sure it must be YOU despite the change of name. Look forward to more of your writing. I've been here 9 weeks and only just getting back into it.

Submitted by TVR on
Full of poignancy, Coral... on great form as usual. Loved the imgagery and atmosphere. Congratulations on the cherries, much deserved... well done, girl! Trev

TVR

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much as ever, Trev!

Submitted by fatboy74 on
It's always nice when I trawl the cherrypicks and see a new poem from one of my faves - what is so good about this and your last poem is the tightness of the word choice - everything seems where it should be, refined and they are a joy to read to boot.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Really appreciate that, fb - particularly as it's so hard to view one's work objectively and I wasn't too confident about posting this, so it's good to have such a constructive comment. I did play around with the ending quite a bit and thanks for letting me know it was worth it.

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love that first stanza, Coral. So many beautiful images and a wonderfully poignant finish. Well done on the cherries! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by seashore on
Much appreciated Magic - many thanks. xx

Submitted by TVR on
Just had to say I love this, Coral. But then I seem to love everything you write. Your poetry always has a resonance that incites one to deep thought. Trev

TVR

Submitted by seashore on
I'm so glad you feel that, Trev and took the time to tell me - it means a lot. Coral