Totterdown
By Parson Thru
Fri, 03 Aug 2012
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Brown and terracotta tiles
mount the hill
like steps to the shrine
of St. Elias
Dressed in drab
for a stillborn summer
the trees yield
to plastered clutter
Crowded-in
neighbour-on-neighbour
painted by children
in every colour
Doll’s house windows
keep their vigil
for bending widows
Toy cars
pour down cataracts
of glistening tar
to a crumbling jumble
of bricks and steel
where God’s judgement rumbles
over no-man's land
From a battleship sky
scavenging gulls
endlessly wheel
and call to the town
as rain pours
on the tumbling roofs
of Totterdown
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I'd like to hear this read
I'd like to hear this read aloud, it has such gentle rhythms. The imagery is kaleidoscopic.
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for a stillborn summer...
for a stillborn summer... nice.
Doll’s house windows
keep their vigil
for bending widows... I think in a poem of this size, every word has to count. I'm not keen on the double use of windows here. Also, I'm not sure what you mean by bending windows?
This is beautiful, some gorgeous images. Well written.
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This poem over olympic telly
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
This poem over olympic telly any day :) So beautifully detailed, a lovely soothing rhythm as well.
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Forgive me: actually reading
Forgive me: actually reading it properly makes all the difference, yes... that works much better .... spare a pair of glasses guv'?
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Some fantastic imagery, here
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Some fantastic imagery, here PT, and I agree with shoe, when she describes it as 'kaleidoscopic'.
This stanza, in particular, stands out for me:-
"Toy cars
pour down cataracts
of glistening tar
to a crumbling jumble
of bricks and steel
where God’s judgement rumbles
over no-man's land".
Tina
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Great poem Parson Thru, I
Permalink Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Great poem Parson Thru, I read this a few times and more and more brilliant imagery came oozing out.
I particularly liked the last stanza, the words tumbled down just as the roofs do.
Well done on poem of the week!
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Fantastic, Parson Thru, a
Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on
Fantastic, Parson Thru, a really pleasing read. The imagery is wonderful and it's so damned musical - I could read it aloud over and over again, but it would sound better in a pleasanter accent than mine. I too particularly like the penultimate stanza.
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In Walsallese, which is too
Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on
In Walsallese, which is too often mistaken for the comparatively musical Brummie? I think not.....
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