cat street

Cherry

By JupiterMoon

Wed, 12 Sep 2012
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7 comments
 

cat street

these are the guards
of my weekday mornings:

soft hill beacons,
paws neatly at rest.
together like lips
that have ceased speaking.

arranged around
my walk,
they are a huddle,
of patient purring
traffic cones.

gathered around,

an accident
waiting to happen.

Certificate U
Poem
Pricklish Allsorts
Nature

Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Hi JM. This is really good.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new JupiterMoon really enjoyed, Well deserved cherries! Definitely the title fooled me! As I am cat lover,thinking of first cat's eyes. Very clever. Traffic purring! traffic cones well explained! Please! how did you get the great title 'JupiterMoon' anything to do with moons,or maybe full moon,interests me to know! Can you say. julie x

Submitted by JupiterMoon on
Thank you for your comments, very kind. And Julie, the name 'Jupiter Moon', is the name of the hero in my forthcoming novel 'Our Butterfly Summer' - I say 'forthcoming' in the sense there will be chapters on here shortly (ish) :) xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new jupiterMoon Wow! good luck with the Novel,looking forward can't wait to read 'Our Butterfly Summer'. Be terific. Re; the name 'jupiter/Moon not moon mad, but love see full moon. Have a book called 'Sacred Places' bought once from Borders when open. Truly amazing the mountains,stories and colour,the Author then come and read apart,have wine all,buy the book. Large book,so much in it! Author is 'Phil Cargomm',still buy of web thinkabout £20,slightly different colour covers. Gave me so many ideas,using in story,maybe or poem like form. Clever you write a Novel. Thanks replying. julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new jupiterMoon Wow! good luck with the Novel,looking forward can't wait to read 'Our Butterfly Summer'. Be terific. Re; the name 'jupiter/Moon not moon mad, but love see full moon. Have a book called 'Sacred Places' bought once from Borders when open. Truly amazing the mountains,stories and colour,the Author then come and read apart,have wine all,buy the book. Large book,so much in it! Author is 'Phil Cargomm',still buy of web think about £20,slightly different colour covers. Gave me so many ideas,using in story,maybe or poem like form. Clever you write a Novel. Thanks replying. julie xx

Submitted by tcook on
I really like this - but 'accident waiting to happen' feels a bit clunky. I've also spent five minutes trying to work out a way to improve it and can't - but I'm no poet!

Submitted by JupiterMoon on
Julie - thank you, will investigate further methinks... Tony - I noticed I'd cut an paste that bit in slightly wrong - though even now, it is perhaps a bit clunky. It was one of those short thoughts that just drift across the mind like a passing cloud...