Understanding

Gold cherry

By bosch

Mon, 12 Nov 2012
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17 comments
 

You slipped into the study,
I followed, locking the door.
Your sarong shucked up,
Hazel eyes, serene, oval face,
Blond hair all in a swirl.
Now--eased--on your side,
Still coming in ripples, you
In the cove of my arms.

I whisper, just the beginning,

"Baby, too fast," you say.

I grab a fistful of damp hair,

Your nails rake my cheek.

for S.

Certificate U
Poem
Romance

Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Hi Bosch, I've read this about five times now, absolutely love it.

 

Submitted by bosch on
jolono: thanks, and a second thanks as you seem to be my most constant reader. swep

Submitted by Highhat on
sublime..superb...

Submitted by bosch on
Highhat: and so your comment, sublime. thanks, swep

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hope you are well, swep. It's good to read you again;-) Tina

 

Submitted by bosch on
Tina: thanks for both the wish and for the remark. swep

Submitted by jolono on
Swep, you should post more, you have a great style that is ideal for this site.

 

Submitted by bosch on
jolono: i've accumulated a small folder of new poems since the book came out last october and probably will start feeding them into the system. thanks, swep

Submitted by steve_elliott04 on
I agree with all the above - sublime! A very well written piece.

Submitted by bosch on
steve: thanks for reading and for your good comment. i appreciate it. swep

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Really glad I found this. It has a lovely refreshing feel to it. Will look out for your other poems.

Parson Thru

Submitted by bosch on
parson thru: as am i glad you found it. thanks for reading and for your good comment. swep

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Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Excellent. And sexy as hell. Really enjoyed. Rich

 

Submitted by bosch on
rich: thanks. swep

Submitted by coolibah on
There's a lot of I's here, S. Perhaps one too many only though, and it dumbfounds me as to why'd you'd deem it as required. Especially when it, and some of the punctation there also, stifles the finale in comparison to the poems prior texture and flow. please just consider these two way streets instead sts: And you, I know baby, know I'm counting on it. And you, I know, baby, know I'm counting on it. Or ignore it, of course, as you more than likely did when drafting the piece. Love it btw.

Submitted by bosch on
coolibah: the closing lines offer her actual speech patterns, provide the emphasis i'm looking for. i can hear her and am re-stimulated by the thought. thanks, swep