Holding On To Nothing
By jolono
Mon, 19 Nov 2012
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I sat and stared at your photo
The day you left,
Thought of all the fun
We had together,
Good times,
Lots of good times.
Singing karaoke,
Dancing to the twist
At Nan’s eightieth last year.
How good we were
As a team,
Me cooking the roast
And you the spuds.
The day we hired
That tandem,
Me on the front
You on the back
Pretending to pedal.
The day our dog died
And we both cried
Like five year olds.
When you had that scare
And we waited
For the results
Too afraid to think.
All clear, so we
Opened the champagne.
The night you finally
Told me the truth
So I put the photo down
I was holding on to nothing.
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Nice build up Jolono and
Nice build up Jolono and then the sad ending- I like the line- holding on to nothing
;)Pia
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Thoughts well drawn
Thoughts well drawn together, and well presented. Rhiannon
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Love the short-line
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love the short-line structure to this, jolono, and the way it trickles off the page. So many bittersweet images, and so beautiful!
Magic xxx
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Intriguing, lots to ponder
Permalink Submitted by Mark Heathcote on
Intriguing, lots to ponder on… :)
Mark Heathcote
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that was a bittersweet
that was a bittersweet little roller coaster ride...very poignant - alvin
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Raises lots of questions yet
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
Raises lots of questions yet it also feels close and intimiate.
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A poem that sums up a
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
A poem that sums up a relationship that starts
off so well, but then turns sour.
Very well put together Jolono.
Peace.
Jenny.
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hi j, if I may ask... what
hi j, if I may ask... what was the truth? Hope you are well :-) $
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Good one, Jolono. Singin'
Permalink Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Good one, Jolono. Singin' karaoke and dancin' the twist. Two of my favorite things. Aside from Snowflakes that stay on my nose and eyelashes, that is. lol. Enjoyed, Jolono. Cheers.
Rich
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Hello Jolono, Read this a
Hello Jolono,
Read this a while back but never had time to comment.
I think this is another fine poem with a twist built in...very clever!
Much enjoyed
Moya
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last line in particular is a
last line in particular is a killer. well done.
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