My Heart, New Heart
By CloudyOMuffin
Fri, 19 Jul 2013
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They gave me a tablet that tasted foul,
Then an injection that made me howl,
The nurse and doctor put me to sleep,
Then I knew that my heart was not for keeps.
There was a bright light above my head,
and the plate-like contraption was painted red.
The machine finger prodding suddenly got sharp,
The fingers were twining my veins like a harp,
The metal plate now pushed through,
Though there was no blood or fatty goo.
Finally the plate found my heart,
And slowly and hesitantly tore it apart.
Now the plate is my new heart,
And instead of me dying,
It gave me a new start.
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Excellent
Excellent CloudyOMuffin.
Welcome to ABCtales. I hope the stent/angioplast continues to work well!
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Oh wow! I just read your
Oh wow! I just read your bio on your front page - it says that you are EIGHT!!! This is an excellent piece if an adult had written it - never mind young child.
Double double welcome Cloudy!!!!!!!
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Wow this really is amazing.
Wow this really is amazing. You have a great sens of rhyme, and it all flows great. Hope to read more of your work soon.
Natalia :)
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Cloudy, this is
Cloudy, this is supercalifragilisticexpialidocious.
You have made my hair blow off my head slightly with this. Cannot wait for more of your skilled work.
Best Wishes,
Ray.
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Hi Cloudy This reminded me
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Hi Cloudy
This reminded me of my own thoughts about the heart when I was a child. Someone told me that a heart could never be touched and that if it was, one would die instantly. This made me very fearful and it was a shock when I heard that people could have heart transplants. Your poem is incredibly good and today I've been trying to write rhyming poetry after reading this, albeit unsuccessfully so far.
Keep writing as I'm sure you will. You and your mother have very bright futures.
all the best
Richard
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Cloudy, at eight, you're a
Cloudy, at eight, you're a far better poet than I am at forty-four. Very well done, young lady!
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Superb! What a lovely piece.
Superb! What a lovely piece. Look forward to reading more from you.
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