Nature in the City

By Ray Schaufeld

Sat, 24 Aug 2013
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The rosy red - the vibrant green
The purple flourishing the scene
The sun the sky the trees the flowers
The thrill of beauty - sunny hours.
 
I had been lost then I was found
My heart felt home, my mind came round
And roving through the terraced street
The august sun felt city sweet.
 
A welcome feel - a tiny park
To this new traveller made her mark.
I missed my coach but couldn't stay
And to the station made my way.
 
The Art graffittied on a wall -
Bristol's Montpelier I recall.
 
 
 
 
 
 
Certificate U
Poem
Lost and found
Travel
Nature
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

i had been lost then i was found' biblical, yet with your own unique slant. Not sure what the IP was, but I like this.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Growing up in Bristol,  I was drawn to this poem.  I really enjoyed all your descriptions.  Thank you for sharing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Thanks both of you. Bristol is fab! I plan to do an overnighter there soon, staying in the YHA and extend my rovings.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You made me really think about our use of nature images to cheer and soften walls of the city, and in our own homes, and even our clothing! Rhiannnon

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

or even going to San Francisco...!   ( hippie song from 1967) cheers Rhiannon you have now extended my thinking. Elsie

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Elsie,

An excellent attempt at the I.P.  I couldn't find inspiration for this one.

Moya

 

Submitted by Raef_Boylan on

This is a solid poem, skilfully structured with a great rhythm. The little bits of green and untouched nature scattered around a city can jump out at us all the more because of their surroundings; I think concrete provides a good contrast and makes us appreciate "the thrill of beauty" even more.

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Hey, thanks for the praise.    Elsie

Submitted by Bee on

I enjoyed this poem, Elsie, it has an up beat feel to it that is very pleasing.

Bee

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Many thanks for your praise        Elsie