Little boy lost … (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 14 Dec 2013
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Little boy lost in a great big crowd
pushing and bumping, the noise very loud;
a forest of legs, and a sea of shoes –
‘I don’t think my Mummy’s are any of those.’

‘If I were to shout, they would all look down,
and all of those eyes would stare at me, and frown.’

Suddenly, “Sh!” “Hush!” “Quiet”: then loud and clear
booms out a voice, “Can everyone hear?
A little boy’s lost – has somebody seen
a lad with red jumper and trousers (– um?) – green?”

‘Then they do look down, and they pull back away:
“Here he is!” “There he is” many voices say.
I’m all alone and I stare at my toes
– a rush and a cry, and my Mummy throws
her arms tight around me, “Here’s my son!”
There’s a great big cheer, and I cling to my Mum! ‘

[This week’s IP: Lost in the Crowd]

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon. 

Nothing worse than losing your child in a crowd. When you get them back, you don't know whether to hug them to death, or scold them for putting you through it. But seen here from the little boys perspective is an unusual viewpoint - seeing all those legs and shoes and looking for his mummy's. Then from not wanting to be looked at to the relief of being found by her. Lovely!

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Bee, I think you got the points I was trying to draw out! My youngest was a bit prone to wander off, and assume you knew where he was! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyHi Rhiannonw, I hope your well.

 

This is Brilliant, well don.

 

take care

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Pretty Rose, I'm glad you enjoyed this. I am well, thank you. I hope you are coping fairly well. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I thought this was such an apt poem for this time of year,  with many parents rushing around town and there little ones fascinated by all the toys and lights.

Thank you for sharing and I hope you have a Wonderful Christmas and a Prosperous New Year.

Best Wishes,

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny, and I hope you have a happy and peaceful Christmas and New Year too.
warm greetings, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello  Rhiannon,

Another great take on the I.P.  How you manage to keep doing that and responding so quickly to each one I just don't know how you do it.

This poem was lovely and unusual as it was written from the boy's perspective.  The last line is so touching.

Hope you had the Christmas you would wish for.

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, again, Moya, they were part memories, and I thought would resonate with many others!

As things are rather busy caring for my in-laws, my daughter, who was staying with her brother, arrived with her sister-in-law Christmas morning to take over and do a dinner for us all plus their families, so they shooed us out of the house to go together to church (something we can rarely do as present) and got on with it, and later their families arrived too! Quite something!

I hope you had a happy day, whatever you were doing. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

This is such a cute, sweet poem.

There is nothing so frightening for  parents than losing their child in a crowd. But I know as a grandparent I have done my share of worrying too. We took the grandchildren to Manchester Museum of Science, and while my daughter took her little boy on the train, I was supposed to keep track of Susannah. She is nearly 10, so not a small child, but she rushed off here and there, looking at one thing, and quickly on to another, before I could keep up with her. But we had a designated place to go to, if she should get lost, which was a relief.

Jean

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. They can move so quickly! and assume you are keeping track of them, and know where they are. Rhiannon