Humanity

Cherry

By Bee

Tue, 04 Mar 2014
  • 5583 reads
17 comments
 

This sea exists
in motion, motiveless 
but for being

there to catch the light 
that dances over
and beneath waves

of odd joys
and bursts of grief.
And tears are fish

caught in weeds
that cling to coral sorrow
of the living

until sleep wraps
the night like a shroud
closing darkness 

on gladness and sadness
without prejudice
ending and beginning 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

This is beautiful. A little meditation, a read to balance ones mind.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Jane.

Bee

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

This is lovely.

Have read it a few times and see something new.

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Starfish Girl. I'm always amazed when someone says they've read mine again. That's so nice.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

HI Bee,

Lovely little poem - very deep.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Lovely comment, Jean. Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by Canonette on

Lovely - ebbs and flows beautifully.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Canonette. I'm really pleased you liked it. Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks, Editor, for the cherries:-)

Bee

Submitted by HarryC on

Another gem, Bee.  I like the way, too, that there's a wave-like structure to the stanzas.  I agree with Bear, too, on how you've worked those breaks and run-on lines together.  Nicely done.

That first stanza pulls you right in.  Who could resist a current that strong? smiley

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks, Stan, for giving this so much thought. Your encouraging words are greatly appreciated.

Bee

Submitted by torscot on

I liked this watery tale.

I'm minutes from the beach and will think of this one again.

Nice one.

torscot

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks torscot. Glad you liked it.

Bee

Submitted by RJF on

This is beautiful Bee. Very atmospheric as well as calming but with a slight melancholy undertone. Very clever. R 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, R, that's really nice of you.

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Bee,

The apparent simplicity of style is so effective with this poem which in reality is so carefully constructed.  The enjambments do a very effective job too.  I will give this more than one read because there is so much to it.          

Moya

 

Submitted by Bee on

Moya, when someone says they would read again is amazing -  I'm really pleased you liked it enough to do that. Thank you so much for thinking about the details, and for your gracious comments.

Bee