The same blood, the same need (last week's IP)

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Tue, 24 Jun 2014
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13 comments
 

You could divide the world into groups indeed
by language, and culture, or wealth and creed;
those that know bondage, and those who feel freed;
into fishermen, farmers, and scholars who read;
those who have much, and those in great need;
into those who are ruled, and those who reign, lead;
into those who rebel, and those who accede;
but all are one people, whose Landlord will plead,
to come for the help that he proffers, with speed,
for his Son came to save, for the lost intercede.

[Last week's IP: Divide the World]

Certificate U
Poem
Christian, Biblical
Spiritual
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Rhiannon,

Don't understand how this could have got so overlooked.  It is another well written, clever poem that is your hallmark.  I have read a number of your poems and they never fail in quality and in subject matter.  This one uses a clever device by using just the one rhyme to illustrate the subject matter.                  

Once again much enjoyed

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

This only came to me quite late yesterday evening, Moya, though I had played around a bit with some of the ideas. Last time I had looked the IP hadn't changed for this week, but when I put it on I realised there was a new one now, but thought I'd go ahead and post it anyway! Very glad you enoyed it. Thank you. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

A clever one-rhyme poem, very well crafted, Rhiannon. Sometimes it pays not to rush into print but to reflect and construct. Congratulations on the cherries.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Luigi, I'm glad you thought so. And I hadn't seen the cherries! regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Cleverly done. Great poem!

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

I agree with all the above, Rhiannon - your work always of such a very high standard, and the cherries more than deserved.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tina, your comment much appreciated, regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Luke Neima on

A great poem Rhiannon - an excellent use of the IP. Very well crafted and a lovely read!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Luke. I'm so glad you found it so. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Such fun,  thinking of all those rhyming last words and still keeping the meaning and structure of the poem intact.

 

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

In fact this came fairly suddenly from thoughts that had woven around with no form emerging for a few days. But it was fun when it came out like this! thank you, glad you got something from it. regards, Rhiannon