Attempts at Haiku

Cherry

By torscot

Thu, 15 Oct 2015
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14 comments
 

 

 

end of Spring

silent chimes

from a blue bell

 

a deckchair 

folds in the 

last of Summer

 

eyes closed

the crunch

of Autumn leaves

 

Winter frost 

waits in 

the wings

Certificate U
Poem

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

the church of Autumn leaves. Just thought I'd add my tuppence worth. I like this, but what's with the micro script?

 

Submitted by torscot on

Thanks for your comment cementman.

Micro script up a font size or two, will chack and amend later if still tiny.

Regards 

 

torscot

Submitted by celticman on

makes life easier and more pleasant for us blind old guys, that have lost their sharp stick. 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I too enjoyed this. I can't always  follow Haiku, as they are so condensed, the meaning isn't always clear, but here you have beautifully caught something of the essence of the four seasons. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by torscot on

Hello  Rhiannonw.

"... I can't always  follow Haiku..."    Me too, it's a style I'm attempting to master.

I should take an example from your Nature tales and put more into it, instead of short and sweet.

I'm pleased to you took the time  out to comment

Kind regards.

torscot

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Small is beautfiul.

Sandlady

 

Submitted by torscot on

"...Small is beautiful..."

Thanks Sand lady.

ps Celticman ticked me off about micro script, so I went up a font size.

 

torscot

Submitted by Bee on

Lovely!

Bee

Submitted by torscot on

Hello Bee

A pleasure to have your support and thanks for reading.

ps. I have been telling non ABC friends to read your journey stories.

I'm going to ask them to sign up and comment directly to you.

Take care

torscot

Submitted by EB on

Well thought out.

Submitted by torscot on

Thanks EB.   "...Well thought out..."   Hakiu I'm learning about, so your comment makes me think I'm ont he right path.

Ps.  I believe I have not payed a visit to your writing, off  now to visit.

 

torscot

Submitted by torscot on

Delighted to be awarded a Cherry.

Thanks to the cherry picker person

torscot

Submitted by seashore on

Just found this.  Brilliant, well done you.  

Regards, Coral

Submitted by torscot on

Hello and thanks to you dear seashore for reading

I hope all is well with you and family and as Insert has said " nice to see you back online writing"

I have a lot of info for you re art, links, etc, to much to mention here, if you wish you can contact me direct on

oharegreen@gmail.com  for all links.

ps Nice to dip back into your old tales for anothe read.

Take care. 

torscot