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Cherry

By Deliberately Evolving

Tue, 08 Dec 2015
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15 comments
 
          
       I dreamed 
   of you in moons 
and stars and 
           skies of 
     the blackest lace.
 I saw the truth deep in your eyes,
as I gazed at your lovely face. I saw a bird, a nightingale,
trapped behind wires, confined. Sadness overwhelmed your
   wings, you had left your song behind. I stroked your                      
             feathers and with a smile I bid my 
                         bird goodbye and laughed through tears
                           of joy and sadness as I heard 
                             you sing, 
                   spread your 
                         wings and fly.
 
 
 

   

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Submitted by Stephen Thom on

marvellous, marvellous visual and fantastic, ethereal transportive quality, loved moments/phrases 'skies of the blackest lace', 'trapped behind wires' and 'sadness overwhelmed your wings'. v imaginative, swells to an uplifting ending

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks ST. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Beautiful, AE.

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Bee x

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks for the cherries admin !

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by VeraClark on

It's gorgeous.Floaty, if I dare use such a word.Rich depth of language.

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Vera - I'm glad you enjoyed it.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Vera - I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Jack Fritwell on

Super bird imagery - both written and visual.

Regards

Jack

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thank you Jack

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Very imaginative and lyrical, Ae. A lovely addition to the Poetry Monthly collection.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Luigi. Glad you thought it was good.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Been reading this again - it's very moving. 

Bee

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

beautiful like a fleeting cloud   .............   isn't it  ..........life .....

                            Thank You

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Marcia.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.