black dwarf

Cherry

By JupiterMoon

Sat, 30 Apr 2016
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black dwarf

 

a fitful,

fretful, dying ember

of a once brilliant,

radiance;

a fallen universe.

 

here is the last gasp

of an entirety.

a lone light

fighting culmination;

felled, by

the determination

of persisting.

 

without you,

without your fusion,

i am only

a compact star;

an endpoint of

something

once stellar.

 

right now,

i am, to me,

a remnant.

left small,

and dense;

becoming ash.

 

to you,

only hypothetical,

a theory formed silently

by bedtime lips;

a shiver and a lullaby

before sleep.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Pricklish Allsorts
Romance
Miscellaneous
Love

Comments

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Very calming poem. Perfect for sitting under a tree. As I am.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Just a suggestion, Jupiter Moon, but I've been thinking about "culmination" and wonder if it's "extinction"?

Don't pay me any mind. Just sitting under a tree. :)

Parson Thru

Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

I like this, it does everything right, nice alliteration to begin with, succinct and with good choice of words.  "culmination" worked for me, "shiver and lullaby", "determination of persisting" the "fallen univese" - they all summoned up the right feelings: a little bit sad, slightly eerie, a sense of something powerful fading.  Nice work.

Submitted by london_calling79 on

How I wonder what you are... Interesting twist when you move from the power and unimaginable might of these distant beings to the tiny warmth of a child's lullaby. Really accentuates the distance and scope.