Ocean

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 26 Apr 2017
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11 comments
 

Swelling, surging, heaving, steely grey,
white-tipped waves race, chase,
press on across the bay,
crashing smash on jagged rocks,
sparks high the billowed spray.

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Sunshine, breeze, and placid calm,
bright and blue, a tranquil balm,
power stilled, no thought of danger, harm,
– wiped out, erased
all signs of fierce and forceful, lashing storm.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Coastal Path
Nature

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

Wonderful use of the words - read aloud, the sounds really evoke both the storm and the calm afterwards.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Airyfairy, I do like to try to get the feel of such in the words, so that is an encouragement! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

The ever-changing sea. Nice contrast, Rhiannon.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, ParsonThru. It was watching a wildlife programme that found me focussing on the sea, which was incidental to the programme, but it's moods were so vivid in the photography.And then I looked through my own photographs of times by the sea in its different moods. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Love the contrast in this Rhiannon, your descriptions are so evocative. A rough sea is so entertaining, from a safe distance, I loved 'sparks high the billowed spray'. A calm sea is inviting. Your piece makes me makes me miss the sea 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

That too is a lovely comment. I'm glad this struck a chord. We are hoping to spend a few days by the Pembrokeshire coastal path again soon. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Appreciated the cherries on this one. Thanks! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I agree with all the above comments Rhiannon, this was such a pleasure to read.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. Glad you thought so, and thanks for telling me. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I love the alliteration and whatever the word is for making the reader experience the word.  Lovely poem.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Glad you enjoyed it, Jean. I do enjoy using alliteration and sounds to make visual, and a musical pattern for my ear! Rhiannon