Undying Beauty

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 21 Jan 2018
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24 comments
 

Half light signals

first flush of dawn

unable to move

in hospital ward,

 

perfect sunrise

shines as canvas

of color brings

tears to my eyes,

 

sweeping soundlessly

across open sky, my

bed becomes a shrine

flooded with gold,

 

I become conscious

of never seeing this

sunrise again, rays

of nature's existence,

 

enduring longer

than humanity,

mounted only by

a window frame.

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by PoppyS on

Made me think that whatever the circumstances, nature never fails to raise our spirits and make us thankful for what we see.

I hope all is well and this is/was not written with the full impact of its meaning and that you do indeed see many more such delights.

Pops ~xx~

Writing is art in pictures – Go paint poetry!

Submitted by Di_Hard on

beautiful, moving poem, with a great meaning. Enjoyed very much, particularly

"sweeping soundlessly

across open sky, my

bed becomes a shrine

flooded with gold,"

this is gorgeous

 

Submitted by mickleinapickle on

Fantastic use of the English language in its written form. Enjoyed the read.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

The beauty of life, lovely piece, like a painting.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

A poem full of pathos, dear Jenny, with a brilliant description of an emotional awakening in a hospital ward at sunrise. A unique experience in one's lifetime that might not be repeated.

My best wishes, Luigi xx

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

What a wonderful experience to warm your discomfort and temporary immobility! No two sunrises are the same!  gives a great sense of the privilege of 'seeing this one'. Sunsets and rainbows and all beauty of our world to be delighted in. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Poppy,

after I had my hip replaced, I was in an amazing ward with a bed right next to a window. I was so lucky to be able to see this sunrise because there were no curtains or blinds. At home I would have the curtains drawn and usually be asleep at such an early hour.

It was a spiritual moment which I wanted to share.

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Di_Hard,

as soon as I saw the I P: 'Once in a blue moon,' this memory of being in hospital was the first thought that came into my head and I just had to get down how I felt. 

I'm glad you enjoyed reading and thank you so much for letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you so much for the read Shackleton and hearing your thoughts has made my day. smiley

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading Philip Sydney. Yes you most certainly are right about the beauty of life. It was good to be able to share this memory and knowing you enjoyed made it even more special.

Many thanks.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Luigi,

you are so right, it was an emotional time I'll never forget, mainly because it was under such difficult circumstances, but that perfect sunrise made the experience a lot more easier to deal with.

Thank you for reading and I'm very grateful for your feedback, your thoughts are always welcome.

Jenny. xx

 

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I loved your impression of my poem. Sunsets are all different as you so rightly pointed out. To have a hospital window facing directly where the sun rises is a unique experience in itself, especially when it looks out over the beauty of hills in the distance. Unlike at home where I open my curtains to the street and rows of houses facing west. But I do get to see the sun go down at home and that to is very beautiful.

Like you said, Sunsets and rainbows and all the beauty of our world to be delighted in. Never truer words were spoken. Our blue planet we should treasure.

Glad you enjoyed and thank you for reading.

Jenny.

 

 

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

The cherries are very much appreciated Editors.

Thank you so much.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Ladylily on

Once again you have expressed your feelings, thoughts and opened your heart to write a lovely piece of work. Thank you my friend.           Geraldine x

LadyLily

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Geraldine,

I was just sitting down with a coffee and having a read on abc tales when I saw your kind comment.

I have to say that I'm an open book when it comes to opening my heart, especially in poetry or any writing in fact.

I'm delighted you enjoyed reading and thank you for letting me know.

Jenny. x

 

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on

Another lovely poem from you Jenny, these are a treat to read. Sunsets and mortality always go well together.

 

Submitted by agnosticnun on

This is quietly beautiful.

Kristi

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

So right F B, sunsets and sunrises do give a sense of mortality.

It's always good to hear from you and I'm pleased you enjoyed reading.

Thank you for letting me know.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What an uplifting comment Kristi. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and share your thoughts.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Jenny, 

This is a truly remarkable poem.  As usual, your description is like a  landscape painting...perfect in every detail.  I have always liked your prose work but I think deep down you are a poet.

Tell me Jenny, did all the gang make it back to Obsidium?

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Moya,

many thanks for your lovely words of encouragement. Glad you enjoyed reading this poem.

Yes everything turned out okay for the gang in my story, they made it back to their planet in the end.

Jenny. x

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Thank goodness for that!  I can breathe again.

Moya x

 

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

Lovely and thoughtful. 'S' sounds throughout give it a lilting, spiritual flow, reflect the nature of the moment well. Much enjoyed :)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you for your warm words of support Stephen, they are so welcome.

Jenny.