Surasawa Pond
By london_calling79
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By Surasawa pond
on a billboard
a holy man paints a lie:
‘On the third day
of the third month
the dragon of this pond
will ascend to heaven.’
Two men scoff
a child dreams of black dragons
a holy man
explodes with laughter
The lie grows a tail
and fins
An Aunt
from Sakurai
brimful with determined faith
pins her prayers on lasting
to see the ascent
Thus, the ripple of the lie
that on the third day
of the third month
the dragon of this pond
will ascend to heaven
From Yamato
to Izumi
as far as Harima and Tamba
the murmur, the arc
the shimmer, the flowering
lotus of the lie
that on the third day
of the third month
the dragon of this pond
will ascend to heaven
So
on the promised day
of the sacred month
with words that slip their leash
the holy man proclaims
he feels the wait as keenly
as the throng of black caps
gathered to witness
the dragon of this pond
ascend to heaven
And on the third day
of the third month
a storm breaks
The crowd
unconscious of the passing hours
see cherry blossoms
a flash of gold
a hundred feet of vision
an Aunt breathing
‘It must have been’
On the fourth day
of the third month
some believe the truths
of holy men;
some of Aunts.
I, your humble narrator,
have not seen the water, but hear
Surasawa pond
reflects the sunlight
without a ripple.
(Taken from Dragon: The Old Potter's Tale by Ryunosuke Akutagawa)
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You drove me to google as I
You drove me to google as I hadn't heard of this before and I 'kind of' got the gist before reading the wiki page, but it was much clearer afterwards, so I'm going to leave the link here in case anyone else is as ignorant as me: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dragon:_the_Old_Potter%27s_Tale. Feel free to remove if you want people to guess instead!
Anyway, onto the poem - it's really clever and very well done! I like the twist you've put on the original and the delicate humour you've used. The description reminds me of willow pattern plates - everything placed very precisely with much meaning.
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Those pesky monks. I guess
Those pesky monks. I guess today we have social media and fake news. A most enjoyable read.
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This is our Poem of the Week
This is our Poem of the Week - Congratulations!
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believeable, but sounds like
believeable, but sounds like government policy with regard to Brexit and prettty much everyting else.
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Sure is a huundred feet of
Sure is a huundred feet of vision here. It's left me dazzled.
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UWhat a beautiful retelling.
What a beautiful retelling, and a lovely story I hadn’t known of. Thank you.
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