To You, Now

By bosch

Sat, 19 May 2018
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As my eyes open

Behind my closed lids,

Scanning the innerscape.

Moving by thought,

But not too quickly.

My eyes on the horizon,

Forward the only way to go.

I feel you feeling me,

Wondering what

Do we do from here?

I'm thinking, hand

In hand, we start anew

                     for S.

 

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Submitted by Parson Thru on

One of those moments. I like your minimalist style. My only thought is the two opening lines. I kind of get the opening of the inner eye, but something jars with the concrete depiction of closed lids. Maybe something about looking inwards? Thanks for your suggestions, by the way. We got cherried.

Parson Thru

Submitted by bosch on

the zen notion, not to over mention what is an interest and not an accomplishment, is to close your eyes and turn your eyes inward, see who is doing the thinking. yes, saw your cherries, and your generous mention of me. thanks. 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Something else I should have taken an interest in and haven't.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Just been enjoying listening to your readings on YouTube, Swep.

I recommend them to anyone else who happens upon this comment.

My readings were always terrible.

Parson Thru

Submitted by bosch on

thanks. here in china youtube is blocked, but i think the reading you heard was from 2010-2011. a couple of the poems that were read have been revised.  thanks again.