Deimos

Gold cherry
Poem of the week
Pick of the Month

By onemorething

Sun, 22 Mar 2020
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31 comments
 

Do not be too still, pause, but

move in the eeriness of change

as before long we will be less restless

together again. 

We might meet by that cherry tree

that orbits the boundaries of the park,

to mourn the loss of blossom

we did not witness the pinked snowdrift of

beside each other. 

For now we will revolve in conjunction,

as planet and moon, Mars and Deimos,

will resolve to remain in our distant trajectories

whilst all we share is dread,

and we will wait, postpone, cancel

before one hand might hold another,

to transmit nothing other

than love. Then I will sit with you

by the pond, we will observe the skaters, 

who in their defiance of physics, stroll the water, 

hair and claw to resist sinking,

we will watch how they do not drown. 
 

Image from wikimedia of Mars, Phobos and the more distant Deimos which is an odd misshape of a moon. 
https://commons.m.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Orbits_of_Mars_satellites.svg

This poem is for my best friend Gina who I may not see for a long time as she is very poorly. She is Mars and I am Deimos clearly...

 

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Submitted by drew_gummerson on

A really beautiful poem for our times. 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thank you Drew, and for the cherries. Am happy that you liked it. 

 

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

I did!

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

Sorry, I've got something in my eye.  Absolutely beautiful.  Captures the sadness of the moment and a hope for the future.  I do hope your friend will be well.

Submitted by onemorething on

Ha. Thanks! Yes, I have every hope pinned that she will. She just needs to remain in complete splendid isolation. She likes the poem which is the main thing. Thank you for reading it. 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Perfection itself.

Luigi x

 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Oh thank you Luigi, that's a lovely comment. Well, a perfect comment! Thank you. Rachel x

 

Submitted by sean mcnulty on

A very moving poem that speaks to these uncertain times. This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day.

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thank you Sean! A very lovely surprise. That's much appreciated. Rachel :) 

 

Submitted by seashore on

Beautifully put, the sort of poem I wish I had written.

Submitted by onemorething on

Oh thank you! That's a very nice compliment to receive! Thank you for reading it. Rachel :)

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I found this very moving too, and beautiful as your poems always are!

"all we share is dread,

and we will wait, postpone, cancel

before one hand might hold another,

to transmit nothing other

than love"

as delicate and poised as blossom petals, or skaters, your poem floats in the mind

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Hi Di, thank you, that's a lovely thing to say. Am very happy you liked it. And as always your comments are almost poetry, floating poetry even! I hope you're well and am looking forward to reading one of your beautiful poems soon. Thanks for reading it. Rachel x

 

Submitted by celticman on

if we can transmit love, then all is not lost. 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Well, that's true. Love transmission is all you need. As long as you have food, shelter, water and basic amenities. Good job I'm not a songwriter. :)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rachel, 

you know when I was young I had a best friend named Gina, we were almost like twins and could read each others minds. I really do hope your friend gets better soon.

I like how in this poem you keep the faith of optimism. To be honest I think mother earth could do with a rest from the usual realities, for instance it's great not to have hundreds of planes traveling across the sky emiting trails, and not so many cars on the roads sending out fumes.

The lines that captured my attention were:-

We might meet by that cherry tree

that orbits the boundaries of the park,

to mourn the loss of blossom

we did not witness the pinked snowdrift of

beside each other.

 

But there is always next spring and a time for sharing in the love of our friendships, we just need to be patient and wait, as you say in your inspiring poem.

Jenny.

 

 

 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Hi Jenny, 

Are you feeling any better today? I hope you are. I braved the shops for onions and gruyere for French Onion soup as recommended on here yesterday. Wasn't too awful. How funny that you had a best friend called Gina. I'm pretty certain that my Gina is glad not to be able to read my mind as she would be inundated with a very strange brew of the nonsense of my thoughts! Am so glad you liked it and thanks for reading it. Rachel x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm feeling a lot better today Rachel, thank you for asking. French onion soup sounds so tasty, it's making my mouth water just thinking about it.

I think I phrased that remark about my young friend Gina reading my mind wrong. What I actually meant was, that quite often she'd finish off my sentances, and would come out with an idea that I was thinking of too. We only had to look at each other and would get what the other was thinking, it would have us laughing at situations and nobody else would no what we were laughing about.

I think thoughts that may seem like a strange brew of nonsense are great. Me and my friend used to talk about some very strange things, though I suppose we're all different, but I like strange anyway.

Enjoy your soup. Take care.

Jenny. x 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

I just read your update on your poem. So glad you're feeling a little better and sleeping and hungry...all good signs. And when you eventually get out in your garden you will find cold sunshine and probably ants searching for sap on your Ash trees. Everyone is pretty strange, but I am a fan of all strangeness too. Take care Jenny, hope another day finds you even better. Rachel x

 

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

This is our poem of the week.  Well done!

Submitted by onemorething on

Thanks so much, that's lovely. Rachel :)

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Poem of the Week. I had no doubt. Huge congratulations.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thanks Luigi! x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is our Poem of the Month - Congratulations!

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thanks very, very much, that's a very lovely surprise indeed. Rachel :)

 

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

Love it. Congratulations. 

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thanks Drew, congratulations to you too, very well deserved for your fantastic story. :)

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Natural progression. yes

Luigix

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Thank you Luigi! x

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Lovely very personal but universal poem. Well done on poem of the month!!

Parson Thru

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