Today I feel Beautiful

By DClaire

Tue, 20 Nov 2012
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Today I feel beautiful, and fragile

Tragic

Exposed; waiting for the bomb to hit.

Life has been wonderful to me,
Yet I am full of doubt, apprehension.

Small moves Ellie… I am only an egg.

What more can I do?
Or less?
Waiting, hoping; dreading a bit even.

Will I sour this with my fear?
Can I tear the skin forming around us,
Scar this loose fitting bond I have waited so long for.
Out of the sheer inability to just let it grow?

Certificate U
Poem
Poetry
Romance

Comments

Submitted by The Talisman on
I love the certainty, and uncertainty of it all. I like the line in the middle: Small moves Ellie... I am only an egg. It reads oddly from the rest of the poem. Like it's a private thought to yourself. Interesting.

Submitted by DClaire on

Submitted by The Walrus on
I ageree with the Talisman, that line in the middle is both disconcerting and appropriate. Nice poem, DClaire. When I read the first couple of lines this came into my head for some reason - 'Today I feel beautiful and fragile in the same instant.'

Submitted by DClaire on
Thank you both for your feedback! The middle is somewhat of an internal mantra of mine/ some of my favorite quotes for uncertain situations. I am enjoying both of your work, and plan to comment once I feel I have something poignant to contribute :P

Submitted by The Walrus on
Lots of folk think that their comments have to be poignant, but that isn't always so - an 'I enjoyed that' or a 'that made me giggle' all help to keep us reasonably sane.

Submitted by The Walrus on
Lots of folk think that their comments have to be poignant, but that isn't always so - an 'I enjoyed that' or a 'that made me giggle' all help to keep us reasonably sane.