First Kiss

By Amazon

Thu, 15 Jan 2009

2 comments

Fumbling to get in close,
Is he going to?

Relish the way his eyes travel,
like bumble bees.

Swallow your perfect pout,then
Tilt your head towards his scent,

Keep purring,
Is this the soft explosion,

Savour his spongy mouth,
Squirm or do you push him south?

Permalink Submitted by Dynamaso on Fri, 2009-01-16 05:35

I really like the economy of this yet how expansive the passion of it is. I agree with Nathan; well done indeed.

Permalink Submitted by Amazon on Mon, 2009-01-19 10:45

Dynamaso, I thank you also for your kind comments. I like using imagery. It makes the poem more beautiful.