Hope

Cherry

By Bee

Fri, 05 Feb 2016
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15 comments
 

Undetected,

cankers break the promise of a bud,



blotch with black, both cane and thorn,

insidious, they spread to mortify a healthy vine.

___

Cut the blighted branch, and stem

the progress of this disconcerting fungus,



then drench the rest with toxic chemicals

in hope of cure - of preservation -



rejuvenation - a gift of longevity 

to the lovely amongst lovelies -



pruned, but blooming pinky in her bed,

until at last her petals fall about her feet



amid the blush and gilding 

of her final season,



when aged, but graceful -

ever grateful for her bright companions,



in the haven of a garden,

she opens up her face to grant the sun



one tender, beaming smile. Her rightful time 

has come to bid the world goodbye.

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

beautiful! Should it be douse? (or drench would be good too)

 

Submitted by Bee on

Yes it should. Thanks insert - and for the cherries. smiley

x

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Ok - I like drench best - sounds more thorough and brutal. Thank you again insert. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Dear Bee...from a technical stance, 'drench' fits wonderfully, forming excellent internal rhyming with 'longevity', preservation, etc. etc. 

As insert says, 'Beautiful'...this poem.  Just beautiful.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

It's great when someone offers you just the right word. It's as if you'd been searching for that very one, and you snatch it out of their hand before they take it back. I'm really pleased you liked the poem, too. Thank you, Tina.

 

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

..... if beautiful is the word.

Very clever comparison of flowers and the human condition. Many deep feelings in here.

.... so good, Bee!

Edx

 

Submitted by Bee on

I'm so pleased you like it. Thank you, Ed.

x

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

The beauty of the rose so touchingly described, and the allegory of pruning and fungicide, giving a new lease of beauty. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Rhiannon.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

really enjoyed the connection of the flower with the human. I felt an ethos of final acceptance at the end which set the poem off well.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Jenny.

Bee

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

"hope"... a philosophy of life! Beautiful words & thoughts!!

Terry

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Terry. 

Bee

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

Lovely words Bee, and as you say giving hope to those who need it.

Lindy

Submitted by Bee on

I hope so, thanks, Lindy.

Bee