Moon

Cherry

By Beeme

Sat, 15 Jan 2011
  • 2354 reads
15 comments
 

A luminous
organic moon
rises high-
flashes its
mineral glow
a halo of orange
light dissolves
into gold

aglow, a blue
rim forms, like
a frozen pond-
magical for the
moment before
it dissolves,

the incandescent
purple-blue shine,
like the presence
of undesired bruises
tainting skin.

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by seashore on
Lovely.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Like this one, Beeme. The structure - nice and tight. You paint a magical picture;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Yazmin on
Beautiful :D Yaz xx

Yaz

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Seashore, Tina and Yazmin. I'm very happy you all enjoyed! :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme Nice one very well explained full of colour and words stand out. lovely. Like the presence of undesires bruises and tainted skin. julie xx

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Julie. I'm really happy you enjoyed and like all the colour imagery I used. :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Beeme, you have really described the moon so beautifully in this poem. I love the colours, as Tina said so magical. Thanks for the read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
this is beautiful beeme - I especially like the last stanza

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you so much Jenny, I'm very happy you enjoyed this so much :) Your kind comment means a lot. Thank you Insert, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one too! Thank you for the cherry, a lovely surprise on a dull Sunday of English revision ;-) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Well done with knobs on...for the cherry, Beeme;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Tina :D Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Pretty wonder4ful stuff and the last stanza with the bruise image is a blinder - really well done. :-)

 

Submitted by Beeme on
wow, thanks so much fatboy! Much appreciated :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Kahdai on
Magical, very your style that I like K x

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Beeme on
Thnak you so much Kahdai! Glad you enjoyed this one :) Beeme xx

k.