Street lights

By Beeme

Wed, 26 Jan 2011
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17 comments
 

The lights flicker
shape-shift,
immerse the
street before me

engulf the people
blur their faces
like melting
candle wax

teal, urban-grey
starred lights
glisten
disorientate

vapour falling
miraging
the cityscape

re-defining
the world for an
instant.

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Comments

Submitted by JoseHdz on
great detail. love it. very urban/modern. cheers, jose.

Submitted by Beeme on
Wow, thank you very much Jose. I'm very glad you ejoyed! Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by fatboy74 on
You have a really clever knack Beeme of finishing poems on just the right note. Very much enjoyed. :-)

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme Hi! yes. I agree with fatboy74 comment to good. julie xx

Submitted by seashore on
You are such a `natural' Beeme. Where does your imagery come from I wonder? I particularly like the last two stanzas. xx

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you fatboy, means a lot especially as I found this ending quite tricky :-] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Julie. Very happy you enjoyed! :] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
awwh thank you so much seashore, I'm not too sure. This poem was inspired by a scene in the film 'proof'. Very glad you enjoyed :-] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Beeme, wonderful descriptive poem, really enjoyed. Thanks Jenny.

 

Submitted by _elle_ on
Love the feel to this, and the endings nice, but maybe a bit too soon? :p x

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you so much Jenny, I'm very glad you enjoyed :] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Lynze... perhaps :-] I might do a follow up piece :] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Sunday :-] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by celticman on
blur their faces like melting candle wax great imagery!

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you! :] Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Kahdai on
ooh such a great writer, am put right in this one xxx K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Beeme on
aww thank you so much Kahdai! xxx

k.