Oxygen

Cherry

By Highhat

Thu, 28 Feb 2013
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23 comments
 

I move with the sun
But these words are exhausted
And my confidence is your guess
Yet as an undefined dependent
I lean on these sweet gestures
Which aren’t meant to fool me
Into believing

I will simply dream
I’m not dying and
hang on to this self-suggested pose,
As a lanky, bony nude
Enjoying my gracious artist’s love

I speak in high-pitched, enthusiastic tones
Of fleeing
but I have a mountain to climb
Before I tell you in all openness
And unintentionally
About those unimportant events

It throws me and makes me restless
But I have a mountain to climb
When I get to the summit I will read your letter
This is the pinnacle of my mountain climbing career
When I get to the top I’m not going down again

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Submitted by ScoZen on
...As a lanky, bony nude..." Hej dear Pia. Are you going to post a photo on abc tales by chance? Passe pa.
ScoZen

Submitted by Highhat on
You wouldn't want to see it Scozen but thanks for reading... ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, there is a passion for breaking free of restraints, in the words of this poem, especially in those last two lines:- This is the pinnacle of my mountain climbing career When I get to the top I'm not going down again Really well put together and I think it's one of your best. Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Nice one, Pia. No not "nice" - horrible word - I mean really well expressed (something I'm not doing in this comment...).

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Jenny- I am so pleased you liked it and that you think it is one of my best. That's really nice to know. I think it is too. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Coral-I like nice and use it a lot myself but I know what you mean but it's difficult to find the right word sometimes and nice comes in handy doesn't it? ;)Pia

Submitted by scratch on
This is one of the best of yours that I have read Highhat.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm glad you think so Scratch. I appreciate your words. Thanks ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks cherry pickers..;)

Submitted by Syphon on
Well deserved Cherries highhat, enjoyed this read, cheers S

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You sure have reached a 'pinnacle' with your writing, Pia, but I'm sure you'll go on...climbing higher, and even higher. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Syphon and Tina- glad you enjoyed. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
I guess I felt I was expressing this very inadequately Stan- but thanks for reading and your fine comment. I'd say it is another breath if life- hope it lasts for a long time- never did make it to the top of Everest though. Ha ha ;)Pia

Submitted by lavadis on
Well this is stunning work. I lean on these sweet gestures Which aren’t meant to fool me Into believing Just when I think you cannot get any better you prove me wrong

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Gee thanks Lavadis- that's lovely to hear. Now I'll polish my halo with a soft cloth and not sandpaper. ;)Pia

Submitted by celticman on
words are rarely exhausted, but maybe they get a bit weary. Nice one Pia.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Celtic

Submitted by TVR on
I love the sentiments you express here, Pia. You have a way with words that’s pleasing on the eye. Nice poem. Well done. Trev

TVR

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you Trev- ;)Pia

Submitted by TVR on
Well done on cherries, Pia.

TVR

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Trev. Nice to see you on my page ;)Pia

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Wonderful, powerful and uplifting, Pia. Keeping the nature metaphor going, it surges with the strength and persistence of the tide. Keep climbing!

Parson Thru

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks for reading PT-will do ;)Pia