We are Rocks

Cherry

By Jane Hyphen

Mon, 17 Jun 2019
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we are just rocks

formed in a

mussy molten fluke

a chance fuse

fused from the glowing

flecks of everything

that ever stirred

on this star we rock

and are rocked

as we break and

scrape each other

on pristine walls

we hammer and

smash upon

our finest traits

until they crumble

then we watch

the dust run

through our hands

and choke on

what we did

still believing in

forever like all

the pretty stones

that roll together

tap each other

form a chime which

rings for epochs

in our veins    

trauma brands us

fossils hidden deep   

and grief scours

exposing little crystals

to light the way

back to darkness

to flux we turn

cold and harden

once again

 

 

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You make a striking visualisation of a 'protective', inevitable hardness, not to be hurt, and likewise bound to hurt each other.

Came to mind Proverbs 27:17: 'As iron sharpens iron, so one man sharpens another.' which has always impressed me as indicating the good we can sometimes do to one another, if, instead of flattering, we are honest but in a prayerful, gracious, kind manner – but it can be a bit painful, unlike hypocritical insincere and useless flattery!

And I also thought of the picture in the book of the prophet Ezekiel in the BIble where he quotes God saying that he will 'give you a new heart … remove from you your heart of stone and give you a heart of flesh' ch36:26, also 11:19, and following with a picture of a valley of dry bones coming together, being clothed with flesh and receiving breath of life from God – a picture of his reviving the nation at the time, but also a picture of his Spirit giving individuals sensitivity to know him.

Sorry, if that seems to be 'going on' but I found the verse stimulating, but didn't want to be left with the feeling hardness is inevitable in life! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Rhiannon, I must say I wasn't aware of all those biblical references, the one about one man sharpening another is very true. Some people do appear to have hearts of stone but stone can have weak point too. Thanks for your comment, it is very interesting.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

spectacular imagery in this one jane- and the lack of punctuation really adds something - well done

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks Insert, I haven't done no punctuation before, wasn't sure how it would go since it felt a bit naked but I liked it. Thank you for the cherries.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jane,

an interesting poem that makes you think about the frailty of life. 

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks Jenny, some people think they're rock hard but we all crumble in the end but our elements can't be destroyed and go back into earth.....or something like that.smiley

 

Submitted by celticman on

I wonder what kind of rock I am? probably a grumpy rock? do rocks grump?

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

You are categorically granite celticman.