An invalid diet for season's change

Poem of the week

By lenchenelf

Wed, 17 Oct 2012
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23 comments
 

Take your Ruskin softened
in a schooner of armagnac
at bloodheat.

Delayed shock tremors the hand,
distorts the eye, sees frailty,

discards earthentones for terse monochrome.

They are to be sloughed as imperfection,
ochreous pigments, a sin of slipware
and Van Gogh; terra-skin of seer's basins,

canvases of whim.

Cling to your vision, discard human prism,
you, who could not endure a splendour,

willow bent as living bower.
Autumn's kiss through Gothic arch.

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
beautiful!

 

Submitted by scratch on
Absolutely beautiful. Superb, inspired poetry.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm with Insert and Scratch on this one Lena- stunning and talented. ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You always leave me standing, Lena. Wonderful stuff. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Doodletastic - surely no tinkering needed?

 

Submitted by tcook on
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Submitted by scratch on
There will be no arguments about that choice TC. This is shockingly excellent Lena.

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Erm, Cor, thanks TC, totally unexpected :-) 'shifts nervously on the spot' IPFNH, Scratch, Pia, Tina you are always so generous in your reading, thank you. FB74, does this mean I can't give it a sharp rap with a toffee hammer now :-) Thank you. all the very best Lena xx

 

Submitted by Kilb50 on
Inspired seasonal poetry! Wonderful opening stanza...superb images...I could taste autumn! Particularly enjoyed: "They are to be sloughed as imperfection, brown and yellow pigments, a sin of slipware and Van Gogh; terra-skin of seer's basins, canvases of whim." Congrats on PoW.

 

Submitted by scratch on
So well deserved Lena.

 

Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Lena, this left me with a feeling of pure, undiluted melancholy. Magical writing. It's what it's all about! :)

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Kilb50, thank you for a lovely comment, high praise from you :-) Scratch, you really are a generous soul, thank you:-) ItSteveDave I do hope the melancholy passes and I am touched that it inspired feeling, thank you :-) and thank you again TC :-) all the best Maddalena x

 

Submitted by celticman on
Ha Lena poem of week. I bet you didn't see that coming! Wonderful stuff, throughly deseved and well done.

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
CM as you can guess, I am boggled! Thank you very much. all the very best Lena xx

 

Submitted by steve_elliott04 on
Cling to your vision, discard human prism, you, who could not endure a splendour, willow bent as living bower. Autumn's kiss through Gothic arch. What an ending. That last stanza so aptly conjures up the most perfect image. Excellent work. Steve

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thanks Steve, very kind of you to say so. all the very best Lena xx

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
wow.. great poem. publish it. cheers, José

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Er, where, who'd have me :-) Thanks so much for stopping by. all the best lenaxx

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
http://www.selbyslist.com/ This is a great list of Experimental Literary Magazines in the US/UK/ETC.. From personal experience, this poem rings: Counterexample Poetics, The Delinquent (UK), ditch poetry (CAN).. But there are plenty to choose from. All editors have their own taste. This is a fine poem, nonetheless.. Cheers.

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thanks Jose, you are very helpful. I'll give it some thought. Best wishes Lena xx

 

Submitted by moonphish on
a wonderfully woven tapestry of word pictures - alvin

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thanks Moonphish, very kind of you. all the best lenaxx

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Trying not to tweak this, but so tempted to re-insert *ochreous* for 'yellow and brown' must... resist... ..o stuff it :-)