Confusion

By pheonix-rising

Sun, 26 Jul 2009
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Why is it
when others are around,
that you are nice,
thoughtful,
intelligent?
Why do others see you
as somebody wonderful,
amazing,
great?

Why is it then
when we are alone,
that you become fierce,
violent,
hurtful?
Why do you change from
one who is great,
to one who is evil,
scalding,
nasty?

And why does it hurt to be with you,
and hurt even more when you are not there?

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Submitted by girlbear on
Very thought provoking poem. I think a lot of people can relate to this sort of behavior, unfortunately.

Submitted by sarah wilson on
Oh how true. Great rhythm here, very well put together:) sarah

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
I really like this and a lot of people, I feel, will identify. Not sure that you need three question marks at the end of each stanza; I think that one at the end would do and the two previous replaced with commas - likewise in the middle of the stanzas. Simple, true and effective! Chris ;)

Submitted by pheonix-rising on
Thanks chris, I'll change that now :) Thank you Sarah, I'm glad you liked it :D How true, thanks girlbear -¦- phoenix

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Submitted by Cavalcader on
New phoenix-rising Very very true well put to-gether.I can identify in it as many mine always says nice outside others nice not here! so wrong! other's now seem to like what I do and can now do.But it's who your with, makes you! thankyou never know person really 37 years long long time julie cavalcader (:-