If you meet me, have some sympathy 26

By rjnewlyn

Wed, 19 Oct 2011

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13 comments

As soon as I was free of the terminal, I thrust my claws in and ripped out the hard drive, trapping Mephisto’s spirit there as efficiently as any magician's runes or pentangles. I tried to figure out what to do next, but exhaustion overcame me and I slept for a while, travelling strange dark roads in my dreams.

When I awoke, I surveyed the wreckage of the flat. There were scorch marks from the battle and the window was broken, but someone had set the chairs upright. Then I noticed Theresa materialising gradually on the couch; she looked as sick as I felt, but smiled faintly.

We spent the rest of the day recuperating in silence – Theresa becoming less translucent as I rearranged myself into human form again. The spotty kid who’d been my target was nowhere to be seen. I wasn’t bothered – he’d lie low and think twice before writing Hell-destroying programs again.

‘So where next?’ Theresa was beside me, looking out over a darkening city.

‘I can’t exactly go home,’ I replied. Mephisto’s fury still buzzed away on the disc in my pocket.

‘Same here.’

‘So …’

‘So?’ Her eyes were shining.

We ran. We’ve been running ever since.

Certificate U

200 words

Other Fiction

Comments

The End. Thanks everyone

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Wed, 2011-10-19 21:55

The End. Thanks everyone for reading and sticking with it! Rob

...nothing like a happy

Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on Wed, 2011-10-19 22:10

...nothing like a happy (ish) ending. Another one starting next week hopefully?

Thanks not needed. The End,

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Wed, 2011-10-19 22:11

Thanks not needed. The End, it cannot be;-( More, please;-)

Boo-hoo I hate happy

Permalink Submitted by celticman on Wed, 2011-10-19 23:32

Boo-hoo I hate happy endings.

I loved these little bytes,

Permalink Submitted by oldpesky on Thu, 2011-10-20 10:47

I loved these little bytes, and I hate endings. Hope there's a sequel or reboot.

Wonderful stuff I've been

Permalink Submitted by tcook on Thu, 2011-10-20 15:29

Wonderful stuff I've been awaiting these for ages and I'll miss them. Another coming along? Something different? Bated breath etc....

Glomps Wow... I can't

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Thu, 2011-10-20 18:27

*Glomps* Wow... I can't believe it's over! It's been one hell of a ride, Rob. Really well done on completing this masterpiece. Can't wait for the next epic ;-) Magic xxx

Thanks very much indeed

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Thu, 2011-10-20 20:41

Thanks very much indeed everyone - very kind. Not completely sure what's next but ideas crystalising a little. In the meantime the long (novel) version of this seems to be humming along very nicely. We'll see ... Rob

I have been waiting for you

Permalink Submitted by fatboy74 on Fri, 2011-11-04 14:43

I have been waiting for you to finish this for ages and like an idiot I hadn't realised 26 wasn't 25 which i've already read - I think that makes sense... anyway great finish and a great start to your next one. Are you going to post the novel version on here? I'd certainly like to read it. Well done :-)

Thanks very much Fatboy. Not

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Fri, 2011-11-04 23:34

Thanks very much Fatboy. Not sure where the novel will go - I'll have to finish it first. We'll see ... Rob

This is so much better than

Permalink Submitted by Sooz006 on Sat, 2012-05-19 21:00

This is so much better than Planet, and I loved that. Tow points. I think you need more end game. It was too easy. A wily ole devil is going to be ready for a trick like that I think, but it does leave it wide open. He's trapped, not finished. And .... I think you need a little bit more target early on to get a pin on him. I saw him as a much bigger character. I thought the computer geeky persona was a mortal disguise. Crikey, at one point I even thought he was GOD. I much prefer what he is, it's perfect and works brilliantly, you just need to give more of an impression of him. A single extra sentence early on would be enough. Brilliant, sorry it's ended.

Thanks very much indeed Sooz

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Sun, 2012-05-20 00:04

Thanks very much indeed Sooz for all the kind and helpful comments. I haven't looked at it for a while now but it's been really useful having your input and the second opinion. Turning it into a novel has been an interesting business so far - good to have a rough line to follow but of course it's far too thin as it is and there are subplots and additional characters to work out. I'm coming up to 70,000 words now and still only around part 7 (although some of the later parts will skim by a lot faster). The nice thing is that I'm still enjoying the writing, despite the late nights, which is something I'm savouring while it lasts. Anyway, thanks again - very kind of you Rob

Hi Rob, Just popped in to

Permalink Submitted by The royster on Sun, 2013-10-13 11:29

Hi Rob, Just popped in to peruse your work. WOW, With just one look I can see where all the cherries have gone. I can see I am going to enjoy reading here. I do apologise for not replying to you re my Seagull. For some reason I did not receive notice of comment. However, I would appreciate your opinion as to improvement. Back very soon. Roy