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Cherry

By ScoZen

Wed, 15 Aug 2012
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20 comments
 

do you remember
declaring undying love
the exquisite italics
on paper pure
like your skin

letter
ribbon tied
wax seal
melting
I love you

wild seas
log entry
deck three
love
overboard

font iris blue
like your eyes
par avion
brief
flying words

cyber script
alien symbols
faceless emoticons
decrying love
do you remember

Certificate U
Poem
Poetry with L plates on.
Love

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
This is beautiful.

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Thanks for your kind comment Sooz. ps I am about to catch up with your Prague Diary tales as due to visit my nephew who lives there. In the meantime I will email him and let him know to read all on abc. Kind regards and take care.
ScoZen

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
oh yes - I agree with sooz

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
I always appreciate your support insert with my efforts with prose/poetry. I learn from other talers on here. Phew, just as well I left out all the commas etc.
ScoZen

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I think you can take those 'L' plates off now, ScoZen;-) Sand Lady

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Dear Sand lady. "...'L' plates off now..." Not yet I'm afraid, a lot to learn and a thanks for your support and encouragement. Kind regards.
ScoZen

Submitted by BensonSpeaks on
font iris blue like your eyes. I adore this line.

BensonSpeaks

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hello spam. Thanks for taking time to comment. re "...font iris blue like your eyes..." I had considered swapping the word font for "...ink iris blue like your eyes..." then my lovely cherry popped up. So, font stays put. Regards
ScoZen

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Love this poem scozen. Well done mate.

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Delighted to have your support fb. I have a long way to go though, I learn from your goodself. Cheers. ps I will be having my mug of cocoa later, minus Mr Armitage of course
ScoZen

Submitted by ScoZen on
And to the Eds. I had problems signing in earlier and found to my delight a little cherry, so thank you very much. ps I hug them when they appear, do I need to talk to someone about the hugging, my GP or...?
ScoZen

Submitted by sid on
Cor! I really liked this. I'm curious to know what you mean by, 'Phew, just as well I left out all the commas etc.' It was a conscious decision then? But I do agree that it works. I'm never quite sure what to do with punctuation in my own poems. I especially like the effect of, 'do you remember' without a question-mark. It becomes something quite different; sort of deadpan and hopeless. And hemming the whole thing in with this doleful refrain, really makes it resonate.

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hi sid. Grammar is not my strong point, I always cock things up with putting in a comma and the like in the wrong place. Insert would kindly point out my errors and I would revisit and edit. Sooz recently commented on a piece, so taking her advice went I back and edited. Plus I learn from all abc taler's how to do things correctly like your goodself. ps Anyway I must go now and do some " peel and chop" I have read about how to do that.
ScoZen

Submitted by Sooz006 on
Nice once Sco, enjoy. Make sure you go the the old caste, it's so beautiful.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new ScoZen Hi! well deserved cherries! Enjoyed all of this the images, and words. First stanza to. I agree with you,I can't do punctuation, only comma and few speech words. But I get most help,by reading others,work on AbcTales no good explaining to me! Can you please tell me word emoticons means= I can't find in dictionaries,may be same as emotions. take care. Like the flow of the poem. What are you 'peel and chop! could be a cooking receipe! julie x

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hi Julie. re 'peel and chop! is a reference to abc sid's tales. Go and have a read through them, you will enjoy them I promise. And the emoticons are those little funny faces you see in text messages. Thanks for commenting and regards to Ray
ScoZen

Submitted by shoe on
Just gorgeous...works brilliantly without punctuation too, as pointed out, the last line takes on a whole new tone.

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Another thanks to you for your support shoe. Still learning though. Take care
ScoZen

Submitted by seashore on
Just catching up on some reading. Well, well, this is seriously good, ScoZen - loved it.

Submitted by ScoZen on
Gosh! "...this is seriously good..." You are making me squirm with embarrassment seashore. I learn from all here on abc tales but pleased you enjoyed the read. ps. my next attempt is going to be on a poetry painting theme, sort of water colourly, oily, chalky etc, fingers x you may like it. Take care.
ScoZen