The Painter and I

Cherry

By JoseHdz

Tue, 25 Jan 2011
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14 comments
 

I want to
Meet a woman
That paints
So she can
Splash paint
On my poems
Spontaneously

And I could
Write words
On her paintings
Asymmetrically

Over
Coffee and cigarettes
We could
Discuss
Who is
More influential
In modern art
Apollinaire or Pollock

This woman
The painter
And I
Could compete
To see
Whose love
Is stronger
Or at least
More flexible

Then
In May
Under
Pink sunsets
We could
Pick flowers
And walk
Backwards
In puddles

Of love.

Certificate U
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by seashore on
Hmmm, I like the poem very much but can only imagine the competition that would be going on here. Fourth stanza would be key......

Submitted by JoseHdz on
ah, yes. perhaps each one would write a poem or paint something representating their love/ and see which one is prettier--win, win situation.. thanks for the feedback, seashore. cheers, jose.

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
...it could all go very very wrong though couldn't it. Taking cynical hat off - lovely daydream kind of poem!

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
One of my favourites of yours Jose, particularly liked the last image which is conveyed with such clarity. Congrats :-)

 

Submitted by Geertje Jong on
I loved this little gem of a poem! Perhaps she could paint pictures to illustrate your poems and you could write poetry to accompany her paintings... Geertje

Submitted by JoseHdz on
insert-- I agree it could all go very wrong; but that usually leads to some great poems! glad you liked this one, cheers, jose.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
FB --i was unsure about the last image (puddles of love)--thought it might come out of nowhere. happy that you liked it! thank you for the feedback, always appreciated, cheers, jose.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
GJ-- I agree that would be a great scenario for a painter and a poet. and there is just enough difference between the two arts to keep it interesting. :) glad you liked this one, thanks for the feedback, cheers, jose.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
and thank you ABCtales for the cherry! much appreciated :)

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Wonderful, almost lateral thinking here, Jose. They do say that 'pictures paint a thousand words' but this poem says it all;-) Tina

 

Submitted by apeljo on
This poem is such a delight to read! The concept is fun and the poem manages to take the concept as far as it can go. This is the kind of poem that makes me want to fall in love again, but this time with a painter! hehe

Submitted by JoseHdz on
SilverSpunSand-- happy that you enjoyed this painter/poet romance poem. thank you for your feedback; it is always appreciated! Apelijo-- I am glad that you enjoyed the concept at work in the poem. Thanks for your feedback. cheers, jose.

Submitted by Beeme on
I really like the ending too, but the whole poem is fabulous! Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you very much, Beeme; glad you enjoyed this one. cheers, jose.