'Friends'

Gold cherry

By shoe

Sun, 13 Mar 2011
  • 5218 reads
19 comments
 

I can't pinpoint when you developed
this unguessed at talent for cutting
finding the marrow, wielding the knife
like a pro
leaving me boned

Raw, in a bed grown big as
a hanger, tiny in acres of flat
cold bedding

watching back to back 'friends'
'look' I want to say 'this is how
people live,
'watch' I'd say 'how they laugh
even when they fall in and out of love
it doesn't hurt, not really

not like this.

Certificate U
Poem
You're O.K, I'm not O.K
Love

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
lovely - particularly the last stanza

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Nice on, shoe;-)

 

Submitted by Beeme on
I really enjoyed this. One of my favourites of yours. Why are you so amazing? I'm in awe of this piece, so very beautiful :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by seashore on
I read this several times shoe - and it just gets better.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
wow, I agree with the above comment, reading this over and over again, the poem gets better and better, the last stanza is particularly powerful and devastating at the same time.

 

Submitted by the unfolding head on
This is really great Shoe... the final few lines are ace. Nice work!

ddf

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks everyone so very much, I'm chuffed that you like it and took time out to comment, really, really appreciated.

 

Submitted by TVR on
I like it too, shoe. An unusual rhythm but it worked really well. Congratulations on the cherries. sd

TVR

Submitted by fatboy74 on
The one where shoe writes another brilliant poem... Just really, really good. :-)

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
I have to agree with everyone and say this is very good indeed.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Shoe yes, I liked this one true. good facts in it, kept reading again. Well deserved cherry! julie x

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks you guys, really glad you like it, and thanks for commenting, interesting point on the forums about comments, I prefer to think of it as mutual support, for which I am forever grateful and without it I would have given up long ago,:}

 

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Submitted by shoe on
Cheers tc! That's made my day.

 

Submitted by hilary west on
I like the way you get to the truth of this situation. Nice one shoe !

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks hilary.

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Brilliant, well worthy of pick of the day. :--) xxx

cool

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Brilliant, shoe! I can't pinpoint when you developed this unguessed at talent for cutting finding the marrow, wielding the knife like a pro leaving me boned - all I can say is, Wow - blew me away this did! Sorry I missed this the first time but glad I got here eventually, a truly stunning poem :) Rachel xx

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks David and Rachel, it was one of those that just came out almost as it is, if only they were all like that!!