Julie's Giro

By jolono

Tue, 10 Jul 2012

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25 comments

Tell certain "friends"
to go to hell
Cos Julie's got her Giro

Put some credit
on the cell
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No "favours" now
when landlord calls
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No staring at
his filthy walls
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No beans on toast
for every meal
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No staying in
for Edmonds Deal
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No junk shop clothes
to dress the kids
Cos Julie's got her Giro

No buying shoes
with Ebay bids
Cos Julie's got her Giro

It's all gone now
the smiling ends
Cos Julie's spent her Giro

Apologise to
certain "friends"
Cos Julie's spent her Giro

The landlords here
she aims to please
Cos Julie's spent her Giro

He's standing up
she's on her knees
Cos Julie's spent her Giro!

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Neat writing. Sad, though

Permalink Submitted by Rhiannonw on Tue, 2012-07-10 10:03

Neat writing. Sad, though – if you use 'friends', you don't really trust them, or appreciate, I guess, and feel patronised, but whose failing is it? Rhiannon

The repetition works so well

Permalink Submitted by Rigel on Tue, 2012-07-10 11:52

The repetition works so well here, jolono. An effective poem that hammers its point home more than effectively.

Thanks for the read

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 12:17

Thanks for the read Rhiannonw.

Thanks Rigel, no idea where

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 12:17

Thanks Rigel, no idea where it came from!

I love this! So wish I

Permalink Submitted by alibob on Tue, 2012-07-10 14:18

I love this! So wish I could write poetry.

Thanks Alibob, thats the

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 14:20

Thanks Alibob, thats the great thing about this site, you can just experiment, I'm new to it as well!

Jolono, This is a great

Permalink Submitted by Denzella on Tue, 2012-07-10 14:39

Jolono, This is a great poem. You say so much with so few words. Loved it! Moya

Heh, thanks Moya, still

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 14:58

Heh, thanks Moya, still learning!

Loved this, jolono. Made me

Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on Tue, 2012-07-10 16:05

Loved this, jolono. Made me want to both laugh and cry at the same time. I think if you left the exclamation mark off the end though it would have a much greater impact. Just a thought :)

Thanks RP, funny you should

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 16:11

Thanks RP, funny you should mention that, it took me a good five minutes to decide whether to put it there or not, five minutes over a bloody exclamation mark! Many thanks.

Made a helluva lot more

Permalink Submitted by hudsonmoon on Tue, 2012-07-10 16:32

Made a helluva lot more sense once I Googled "Giro" lol. Wonderful and fun to read, Jolono. The pacing is great. Rich

Cheers Hudson, not even sure

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 16:54

Cheers Hudson, not even sure if they do them anymore! But a "Giro" was your benefit cheque that came once a week, I know I used to cash them!

I think "Julie's Giro" would

Permalink Submitted by Kilb50 on Tue, 2012-07-10 18:24

I think "Julie's Giro" would bring the house down at a live reading! Enjoyed!

Thanks Kilb, I'll take it to

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 18:31

Thanks Kilb, I'll take it to the next one!

So simple and so good.

Permalink Submitted by seashore on Tue, 2012-07-10 18:52

So simple and so good.

Wow thanks seashore, glad

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Tue, 2012-07-10 19:05

Wow thanks seashore, glad you liked it!

You are a dab hand at this

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Wed, 2012-07-11 09:21

You are a dab hand at this poetry lark, jolono. Great stuff;-) Tina

Thank you Tina, this site

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Wed, 2012-07-11 10:11

Thank you Tina, this site has helped enormously with my writing. Reading other peoples poetry, of all kinds, is an inspiration. A big thank you to all the really good poets on here, of which you most certainly are one!

Marvellous social commentary

Permalink Submitted by bryanhollamby on Wed, 2012-07-11 11:14

Marvellous social commentary on what so many people are forced to go through in these difficult times, jolono, conveyed with excellent dark humour, especially towards the end. Let's hope Julie's next Giro isn't too long in coming!

Thanks Bryan, glad you liked

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Wed, 2012-07-11 12:10

Thanks Bryan, glad you liked it.

Thanks MD,the name Julie was

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Thu, 2012-07-12 07:58

Thanks MD,the name Julie was for no other reason that it just seemed to work.

You kid yourself Jolono, you

Permalink Submitted by Edenfalls on Thu, 2012-07-12 12:09

You kid yourself Jolono, you can write poetry, and very good poetry it is. This is what some would call "Street Poetry", which I really enjoy, just not very good at it myself, but this is very good indeed!

Thanks EF.Glad you enjoyed

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Thu, 2012-07-12 12:40

Thanks EF.Glad you enjoyed it mate.

Cheers Archie, appreciate

Permalink Submitted by jolono on Wed, 2012-07-18 12:52

Cheers Archie, appreciate it, good points. I think i'll change the Edmonds bit, the bit about the filthy walls was a way of saying she doesn't have to stay indoors now staring at the walls cos she's now got money to go out with. Thanks mate.

ah, the old Giro. Happy

Permalink Submitted by celticman on Tue, 2012-09-04 17:17

ah, the old Giro. Happy memories. Great stuff.

Julie's Giro

By jolono

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Neat writing. Sad, though

The repetition works so well

Thanks for the read

Thanks Rigel, no idea where

I love this! So wish I

Thanks Alibob, thats the

Jolono, This is a great

Heh, thanks Moya, still

Loved this, jolono. Made me

Thanks RP, funny you should

Made a helluva lot more

Cheers Hudson, not even sure

I think "Julie's Giro" would

Thanks Kilb, I'll take it to

So simple and so good.

Wow thanks seashore, glad

You are a dab hand at this

Thank you Tina, this site

Marvellous social commentary

Thanks Bryan, glad you liked

Thanks MD,the name Julie was

You kid yourself Jolono, you

Thanks EF.Glad you enjoyed

Cheers Archie, appreciate

ah, the old Giro. Happy

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