When Death Stopped By
By Natalia
Wed, 01 Aug 2012
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The aura of his dark cloak
Surrounds me
His deathly voice
Captures me
I have disappeared
I cannot think
As he kisses me
With his shadowy lips
He is everywhere
But yet nowhere
Soon I will perish
In his deadly embrace
He is owerpowering
I am inconsequential
He is evil
I am pure
He will murder me
While I stand by
I will die
As the dead watch on
Oh Father!
You must come
You must save me
From eternal oblivion
Save me
Save me
Do not be too late...
You are too late
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Very dark Natalia, but very
Very dark Natalia, but very good, last line pulls you up sharp!
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Dramatic and Gothic,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Dramatic and Gothic, Natalia. Much passion in this, and it shows.
Look forward to reading more of your work.
Tina
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I feel the Gothic tones in
Permalink Submitted by Bryan Skylar on
I feel the Gothic tones in this poem. There are only two areas where I could see an edit. "Soon I will perish" should be "Soon, I will perish." And where you write "Oh Father" I believe it should be "Oh, Father."
Reminds me of Darksiders 2 due out on PS3 and Xbox 360 the 14th. You play as Death himself.
Good poem.
Bryan
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