You Breathe
By Jessiibear
Sun, 19 Aug 2012
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9 comments
You smiled
I sighed
It left
I died
And, your
Eyes wide,
You fell
To my side...
You breathe
I hum
You sing
I strum
The strings
Your heart
Had since
Laid hope on...
We danced
We laughed
Under
Our tree
I love
You, dear
So don't
Forget me...
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I've read this several
Permalink Submitted by hudsonmoon on
I've read this several times. Not a word wasted. Wonderful.
Rich
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I love the delicate
I love the delicate contrasts in here, Jessica...
You breathe
I hum
You string
I strum
I'm going to SO come back to this!
Natalia :)
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You breathe I hum You sing I
You breathe
I hum
You sing
I strum
Really some of the best simple poetry I've read in a long time (don't read much poetry, granted, but that doesn't change how well done this was)
Simple, unwasted, brief but it remains in the mind long after I read it. Read it twice, actually.
Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...
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Another fine piece - smooth,
Permalink Submitted by JupiterMoon on
Another fine piece - smooth, deft and entirely uncomplicated. A work of art indeed.
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