Close-knit

Cherry

By celticman

Sat, 16 Feb 2013
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9 comments
 

My poem is netted so wear the crown

That I have the good part down.

Writing goes on when doing other things -

Grief tested, laugh lines broken, wordless stings.

Each step is tested without sight -

A formula, A record, A map of the night?

Impulse surmounted, detachment seeps in -

Take a look, take a peek, see your sin.

You will not finish all that you start-

Surprise lies in the window face of art.

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Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
I loved this Celtic- you're such a good writer and this is the first time I've seen a poem by you. Stunning.

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Writing goes on when doing other things. The line I'm most scared of: You will not finish all that you start. Great lines, celtic. Rich

 

Submitted by celticman on
changes the first line Pia. I'm not a poet, but this wrote itself, which helps. Thanks Rich. Us un-poets need to support each other in our poverty of poetry.

 

Submitted by lavadis on
Surprise lies in the window face of art. Yes it does - very strong work

 

Submitted by celticman on
thanks lavadis

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
and a cherry and a rhymer. This gives it straight and I like it - bullshit free zone and You will not finish all that you start rings very true. This is in the story section so will be missing reads from the poemheads.

 

Submitted by celticman on
cheers fatboy. I don't seem to have a poetry option on my toolbar thingy. Perhaps god is telling me something.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new celticman Enjoyed all,sent comment,pressed 'like it' button. All gone. Happens! So agree all others. Like words, "writing goes on when,when doing other things. Ray is re-tired health in same room set his computer up,so share,have get up quick for kitchen,loose concentration. T.V is on has till goes out etc. Well written still can't work Forum yet! Any attachments,setting up things,Ray does for me. Well deserved cherries! julie

Submitted by celticman on
thanks julie, much appreciated you taking time to read and comment. take care.