Good Grief
By EB
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Her steely cries plunge deep
into the stuffing of his dream. Something -
a chair - flung window-wide behind
thin plaster walls. Glass. Blood
cold silence before the sirens.
Pillow ripped from ear.
Stunned tearless in the aftermath...
Son, she's gone. Relief. Good grief.
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That grief can be good - in
That grief can be good - in certain cases. I saw it as violence - not so much from another, but perhaps - chair smashes window then she jumps. All heard from the child's room.
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That's horrible - what a sad
That's horrible - what a sad and terrible poem. Very well constructed though.
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Those terrifying noises a
Those terrifying noises a child hears whilst guessing as to what they are adds to the tension in this. I found the following lines hauntingly visual ; 'deep into the stuffing of his dream / a pillow ripped from ear'. Concise yet thought provoking.
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Such sadness pictured so
Such sadness pictured so effectively and starkly. The word 'steely' got me wondering. One longs to know the 'why?' and the story, but then realises, better to realise how many situations can be like this, and how harrowing not to be able to help, and realise that relief does encompass grief, and both can be good. Certainly got me thinking and empathisisng. Rhiannon
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Excellent piece Elliot = A
Excellent piece Elliot = A whole life changing scene in 8 frantic lines. Well done Poet, enjoy the fruits of your success on this one
Rob
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