A Good Heart

Cherry

By Bee

Wed, 01 Jul 2015
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21 comments
 

If you could turn away from me

and face the wall... Cold

jelly and uncomfortable pressure...

Now, on your back, knees bend - breathe in -

hold. And again, again, etc.



Looks good. Very good. Size, normal -

chambers, ventricles, no calcification of the valves...

Good heart. Just checking to see

if you are up for the challenge of the damage 

of the cure. And you are. Dress please!



Thank you.

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Your heart is good Bee, in more than one respect.

Significant words.heart

Jenny. x

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jenny, your lovely!

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Felt I was there with you feeling the jelly and the pressure!
One more hurdle/procedure passed, and positively.
'if you are up for the challenge of the damage of the cure' very cleverly worded, Bee. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much Rhiannon.smiley

Bee

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

As with much of your writing Bee so simply worded but telling us so much.

A good heart in deed.

Lindy

Submitted by Bee on

I am a bit simple. Thanks Lindy.wink

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

poor old heart, a few buckles and stents and it'll be good as new. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

this is prep for the chemo I presume. I can't imagine that the Vitamin c therapy would have any affect on your heart, but then again, I don't know, as it is using something out of its normal context, and creating peroxide.

I too appreciated your choice of words.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Jean.

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

It has the quick efficiency of the doctor in the words and underneath it all the longing of the heart.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Great feedback, Catherine. Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by lenchenelf on

...to draw on such an empiric process and inevitable distance from self to draw it back to physical personal experience and share. xx

best wishes

lena x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you for your comments Lena, and for the wishes, too.

x

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

xx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Ed.

xxx

Bee

Submitted by jolono on

Like everyone else Bee, I was struck with the line "Just checking if you are up for the challenge of the damage of the cure." So very well put.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jolono. 

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

I agree with all the others about that particular line.  It is so arresting.  You have such talent that you are able to turn bald statements into poetry but with such an economy of words.  Loved this but wished it was not from personal experience.

Still thinking of you,

Moya xx.  

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thinking of you too, Moya. 

Thank you.

xxx

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

For the lovely cherries - smileysmileysmiley

Bee