Standing

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 29 Jun 2015
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9 comments
 

Stung in the moment, alone, but for the fly 
in my eye, I bellowed inside, and nobody 
heard, or noticed my tears fall over the rails 
into the rippling stream

beneath my troubled thoughts. Tears are 
good, they wash away dirt and wayward pests
that trigger emotions, like wanting - not -
and letting go. I cross each bridge

where hazards are rocks that trip us up
along our journey, and wonder - why
do flies choose eyes when the world 
is so wide? Seems no one can answer. 

I follow meandering dapples
and shadows, where over the shallows - 
the fishing bird flits in the diamonds, streaking 
electric tints through my good globe, 

whilst the injured party - 
indulges itself in pity, forever a-blur 
in the disappointment of not having seen
the object of it's downfall in time.

Certificate 12
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Do some have more susceptible eyes? My husband certainly does seem to, espeially when cycling, though sunglasses help. But you seem to to tease to the sometimes welcomeness of something that triggers the tears to help more than hurting eyes, and releases the emotions. Flitting back and fore works well, and with the touches of humour and the beauty of the scene (words describing even better than the picture!) Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon.

I don't know If some have susceptible eyes. It's never happened to me before, but maybe it's going to be my new thing. Glad you liked the scene, and thank you for your thoughtful review. I'm finding it a bit difficult to write as I'm lying down with vitamin C dripping into my arm. Nice to read you, though, coz John's gone off to a coffee shop for a break.

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

words and picture - both beautiful

 

Submitted by love_writing on

This is beautiful Bee...took my breath away.

love_writing

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Mine too, Bee.  smiley x

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

To get stung in the eye seems so unnecessary considering all your other problems at the moment. But you take it, describe it, experience it, and make it part of your life pattern. Such a gift you have.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by celticman on

the world is wide, but there's only us in it. Flies know where the sweet stuff is. 

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello again dear Bee,

Took me a little while to get this but on second reading thought how could I not get it.  Your poetry is always so accessible.  Loved it.

Still thinking of you Bee,

Moya  

 

Submitted by Bee on

Ah, thank you for taking the time, Moya, that's really nice. Thanks for the thoughts, too. Same back to you.

xx

Bee